Reviewed up till 8th chapter....
I agree there are very few grammatical errors , just some typing errors mostly in chapter 1 . Other chapters are mostly clean of any grammatical error. Go through chapter 1 once to correct the mistakes.
Read the story now
Coming to the plot, it is interesting, captivating, catches the reader's attention,, unique and lovely.
The problem is the first impression here, the book cover doesn't give the vibe you want tit to say Like the color are way too bright. You should show one side darker and on side bright. Showing the light of one charter eliminating the darkness of another.
The charter development needs improvement . Chose a specific character and stick to it. Too much complex characters makes it hard for the reader to feel their realistic. feeling .
Overall the book is great and fun to read . It covers the most crucial topic about the sexuality acceptance of kids. Do continue your work and don't ever feel down. Good luck for your writing future.