Crystal love

Potential

I gave you four stars because I would have liked more description of the characters. You have some errors try using a grammatical app. I think this will have great potential. We all have our writing style. I will finish the book, curious to see where this leads, and I will change my review once I see more chapters; there is only a few to go off of.

Enjoyed

The book was hot and steamy phew 😥 I noticed you said you will edited it so I am not going to critique the grammar and writing. You have a good dialogue going for you. When writing BDASM things can be tricky and you got it. I have a great understanding of BDSM. I enjoyed it.

Very good

I think you did very well with your writing style, my son enjoyed reading the book with me, I normally would pass a book up like this only because it is more for the younger generation. This held my interest. You’re timing was punctual. I don't have any criticism to say about this book. Well done, I recommend this for your children or the younger generation.

Bored

You have excellent writing techniques. I was bored with the whole story. The characters were boring. There wasn't enough interaction between the characters—just my personal opinion.

Think this book has potential to be so much better. From what I have seen from your other books.

Potential

I felt the story was rushed. The dialogue was okay, not as strong as I would have liked to see for this kind of book. I like the idea of letting readers use their imagination. Some books I like that and some I enjoy a muse and description. With this kind of book, I would have liked to see more details of how she became a little, how he became a ‘Daddy’ these books can be tricky to write. I understand they have a way to talk as she is a little. He is a ‘Daddy’ He doesn’t seem very strong as a ‘Daddy’ would be with a little. You have a great idea of the story and plot. The grammar and punctuation can be fixed quickly. Little more details and a clearer outlook of her life would help you out a lot. Hard to review without the book being finished. I always change the review once you finish the book. I am not rude; I want you to succeed. These stories are a big hit on these apps. When a character speaks, please start a new line; otherwise makes them jumbled up.

Potential

The grammar and punctuation need work as I understand English is not your first language. I recommend using a grammatical app, use a beta reader from the group section of this app. The plot was right, and I would make paragraphs 5-8 no longer. I enjoy the characters. Somethings are really jumbled up, get confusing please don't take me as being ruse this book has fantastic potential, I want you to succeed 😀

Great story

think the onshore story was done very well. Do you plan to make this into something more? I think it would be amazing if you did to give insight of what happen to his family, life with his family. I could go with emotion like he was insane talking to ghost of his past. You really hit the emotion part very well. Dialogue was done well. Definitely gave me the chills and was creepy in a good way. Good job

Very well done

You have a great dialogue; the writing is on point. I, however, have a hard time getting into this kind of story, but your way of writing is captivating. The first chapter pulled me in.

You're paragraphs were placed right. I think you did great overall.

Loved this story.

The writing is beautiful; I am going to add this to my reading list. I love how I can feel the emotions in this book. The dialogue is done well. The characters sound like humans—just overall amazing.

Nicely done

I usually am not into these stories, but I took the time to read them. I must nice, and it is a charming work. It was written well. Keep me intrigued, wanting to read more. Not a lot of stories in here can hold my interest, but your dose. There were some errors but nothing that wrecks the book. Very good I hope they're more chapters to come!

Very good

I was pulled in and love that Auggie is rebellious, like he is just enjoying life trying to find his way. The dialogue was done well. I am interested. I like how you wrote his character. I want to feel the emotions feelings I did. I will be reading more. I don't usually go for a book like this, but I am curious now want to read to you finish the book.

Nice

This book is done well with minor issues. I would like to see the brothers have their personalities. I am curious about what type of style of the book. Is it going to be a soft kink or like BDSM kink? I am excited to find out how your book plays out. I can’t wait to read more will recommend your book.

Beautiful

This story is beautiful so far. I added the book; the dialogue was excellent; the interaction with the characters was very well done. I want to read more of your book. I usually can't hold interest in books. I am very interested in this book.

Loved it

I really like this horror book. This was a great fanfic from what I have read, I usually don’t read fanfic books. I am fan of the 70’s, 80’s early 90’s. Horror flicks. I am intrigued plan to finish the book.

Love it

I liked this book. I am not into fantasies. This pulled me in. The Interaction, the dialogue was beautifully done. I am becoming invested in your story; that is hard; I become bored with these stories. I recommend this book to everyone. What I would like to say is you should change somethings like leaving some mysterious. Only one thing I have to say about this beautiful book.

Good

This was the true reality of how the mafia is. There were a lot of missing parts of some of the characters. Left me wondering what was going did one survive the surgery? More of Val's POV: why he is the way he is. Was this supposed to be a romance? Seems more like action, drama with some thriller. You have good ideas for stories, there were some choppy parts in this story with a lot of confusion. I enjoyed the story none the less. Because mafia men are

Intrigued

I like this book a lot; it held my attention. I usually get bored of stories quickly. You can write beautifully and capture your characters and their emotions. I love how you have them interact with each other, for that is essential in a story. The dialogue is excellent, the story plot was good so far. I definitely recommend this story.