Cynthia Hale

New York City

Simple but significant.

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The Jealousy Game

Hello Author!
This story is great except some aspects such as your writing style and plot. Compliments first, your technical writing skills are good, you used proper grammar, punctuation, etc. But you plot is a little too cliche, and even though I have nothing against cliches, some other readers definitely would. As for what is cliche, the "create fake boyfriend to make ex jealous but falls in love with said fake boyfriend." So, that's it with the plot issues. On with the writing style. Sometimes, your stories could be too dramatic, like "Pranking the Bad Boy". The plot is mediocre to good, but the way your characters describe the scenes are a little unreal and naive. Even when your characters have great depth and are developed well, the style and inner thoughts of them could make them seem naive and stupid.
Overall, this story has great potential and there is still room to improve. I want you to congratulate you on writing such a long story, because I know writing takes a lot of work.
Good job, author!

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Prancing The Bad Boy

This story was great because of several reasons. First, the plot was very interesting, but the change of the main pairing was a little abrupt, you could add some chapters to describe how, for example, Matt and Grace got together, and not just him asking her to a ‘friend date.’ Secondly, your writing style was good, except, perhaps, you could lessen the amount of dramatic scenes in the story. Dramatic scenes are vital to the plot, but it was a tad dramatic, make it more realistic. Thirdly, your technical writing skills are perfect, there are no grammar or punctuation errors throughout the whole story, and that is satisfying. I had read too many stories with great plots and no grammar. Overall, this story was the best in the best, a great book, and well done, author!

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Amazing

This story is amazing and fantabulous, it got me hooked right up in the summary. Your grammar and writing styles are great, and the plot is wonderful too. Great job!

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