A Diamond in the Rough
I liked the action scenes. They were swift and brutal. I'm also intrigued by the main characters and would love to know more about their backstories and relationships. Aurora is definitely the protagonist, and I would like more of the story to be told through her perspective and experience the story through her POV.
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The style is very cinematic, which worked in places. However, overall, I would love more world-building and get a sense of the setting and locale.
Overall, it could use some polish. There are scattered shifts in verb tense and some POV trouble in the beginning which includes an omniscient narrator that seems to quickly disappear.
Please keep it up. Focus on the relationships and character development, and hopefully the "war" will have something to do with tearing those relationships apart.