Inst1nctualWater

Dragons, mythical creatures, and an enjoyable book.

To start things off, I'd like to say that overall, the story was a solid 5 stars. Though the technical skills lacked a bit from here and there (thus affecting the writing style), it does not complement to the overall aesthetic of the story itself.

To start the plot, the author established a sense of humour. The opening sentence made me chuckle a bit. I could image an old mage saying something like this in a deep voice, and it was really funny. Over the past few weeks, I have seen a lot of plot's beginning with a short, dense packet of information. This story, like others, starts with an opening 2-3 paragraphs of information about the main character. To adumbrate, the author combines a perfect amount of description with dialogue.

The authors writing style, like states above, is really unique. Perhaps the most unique feature of the writer's style is the fact that he/she, unlike others, combines BOTH large and small packets of dialogue. This isn't very common, as most authors usually focus on extremely long and tedious pieces of dialogue or very short ones. This writer perfectly combines both, which I like. However, though this isn't a mistake, I would like the point out that since the start of the story, you have set the tone and mood for the story to be that of similar to a piece of classic literature; writing that includes barely any use of slang, as well as being very descriptive, and formal. This mood should, in my opinion, be reflected throughout the story. Thus, when you used more than 1 (in one case, 13) exclamation marks, it stood out to me. Though others wouldn't really recognise it, I think that this deviates from mood and tone you set your text up to be (that of a formal, descriptive, almost piece of classic literature, to that of a story that uses 13 exclamation marks in the dialogue.)

And to finish, the author's technical writing skills. There is no avoiding the occasional mistake of a missing comma here, or a missing capital there. The author, like many, tries to appear fancy with his/her writing and actually succeeds, leaves room for barely any errors.

Bravo author, keep writing,
Inst1nctualWater

Dive straight into the action.

There are no short of war books on this platform. They often range from the Battle of Thermopylae to the Gulf War to the Vietnam War. This story, however, deviates from this trend. The plot is intriguing, especially the dialogue style for writing. This author's writing style is certainly unique, and quite frankly... I like it. Sometimes the reader is not looking for endless description on how the character says a certain word, and we just want to know what the character said, and move on. This author uses the character name, and then a dash. This is quite unique, almost as if it is a play. The dialogue itself though is quite interesting. Short and snappy, no room for vagueness.

Another point to make is about how straight-to-the-point the writer is. I am starting to see this a lot and I think it is a good thing. Many writers, including Nitesh are starting to write their stories with a short and packed description beforehand. Like I said before, I think this is great as it gives the reader something to work from. Instead of digging endlessly into the smallest details to infer a minor detail about the character which may or may not be superfluous, this author gives us a large packet of information regarding the character, and then allows us to form our own opinion as the story develops.

I think that the only thing the author lacks is sense of sentence length. In one instance, a sentence went on for 6 lines. This can be quite daunting, and so I would recommend the author to shorten the sentences, instead of dragging it on for 6 lines with commas. However, this isn't even a big issue as many readers create their own breaks in the sentence without regard for if there is a full stop. Overall, the author's writing style and plot complement each other to create an amazing story; one that is intriguing, flowing and insightful, as it gives a perspective readers aren't really accustomed to in the average war book. Thus, this book earns a 5 star.

Good stuff author,
Inst1nctualWater

A romantic book for a romantic person.

This book starts off strong! It is quite intriguing and hooked me in, especially at the third chapter. I know that I was certainly disappointed when I finished that chapter because I couldn't read further! The writing style is superb! Although some words were superfluous, the author used the perfect amount of description and dialogue to create a seamless, flowing story, without the redundant descriptions we see so often in others! The use of parentheses to explain certain words for people who are not from that cultural background were certainly helpful! I loved reading this book so far, and I cannot wait for more chapter to come,
Stay Safe,
Inst1nctualWater

An insightful book.

To start with, I'd like to say how much it touches my heart to see someone write so graciously about something so serious. People who suffer from things, no matter how small, could definitely relate to this novel. Though this story may not be the most top-notch in terms of dialogue or description, it certainly connects with people, and I think that's a very charismatic skill to have as a writer.

Overall, the plot of this story is intriguing, as the chapter progresses we are pulled in to see how she reacts to various situations. The writer got straight to the point, without any circumlocution (vagueness), in paragraph 2. Though some may not prefer it, writing most of the key information about the background of the character in a packed paragraph can actually be more beneficial to a story, than just introducing certain aspects over time. While the author still does introduce certain aspects over time, he/she sets a good foundation for the reader to continue with.

The style of writing is only a complement to the plot, creating a seamless, flowing story. The author uses a perfect amount of candor and description to inform the reader about the setting without them bored. In terms of dialogue, the author quite frankly uses a lot. This being said, I think that dialogue is an essential part to a story of this genre. Dialogue plays an integral part as it allows the reader to read the emotions of this character more easily. The most important part of a story like this are the emotions... how the character feels. In all honestly, I think the story would do better with more emotional description of how she is feeling internally; however so far the amount is adequate.

As many authors do, when Keekz was writing this story, he/she went above and beyond with grammar; trying to use as much sophistication as possible. While the story contains a variety of sentence types, the author also includes dialogue (as previously stated). And this is the only hole in the story. Not the dialogue itself, it's amazing, but the grammar. In many instances, the author used commas the end a quotation when there was no follow-up from the same character. For example, if I were to write "Hello, my name is Inst1nctualWater." I would end it with a full stop, not a comma UNLESS I were to continue by saying "I am here for the interview." However, this is a minor issue and only a keen eye would notice this. And even if the author were to make this mistake, it would quickly be washed away as the reader continue to enjoy the beautifully written story ahead of them; thus earning this novel 5 stars.

Well done author,
Inst1nctualWater

Beautiful writing style makes a beautiful book.

After 1 chapter, I can tell the author put time and effort into this book. I really appreciate this writing style from the author. If I were to adumbrate it, I'd say it's similar to the style of Dan Brown; Using a variety of point of views to create a suspenseful novel, to keep the reader intrigued all the way. It's rare, or at least uncommon, to see such a writing style where the author genuinely takes into consideration the cultural context of the story. The use of apostrophise to drop letters in certain dialogue really adds an extra layer of realism into the story. Many authors tend to use modern dialogue for a story set in the archaic English period.

Where the author excels in his writing, he certainly does not lack in plot and character development. The character's such as Jack have been beautifully though out. I'd certainly agree that he is an interesting character, and I like how the author leaves some holes in his story for the reader to fill in for themselves. His amorphous personality somewhat allows the reader to fill their own ideas in his shoe, making him a slightly different character depending on the reader, which is a tricky yet possible task to do as a writer; one that this writer has done perfectly.

Does the author make mistakes? Of course, like many, the author has gotten extremely involved in the minute details of the story, he fails to realise that he missed large points. But don't we all? As a writer, it's alright to get so caught up into the actual story, you miss basic things, like in this author's case... subject-verb agreement. However, this was such a small error, that would go un-noticed by many people. Other, more adept, readers will notice these small, minute details that the author left out... but in the end we forget about it, because as we continue reading we our eyes feast upon a truly amazing story.

Well done author, you're going places.
Inst1nctualWater.

A feisty couple chapters to start off a book.

You wrote an grippling first couple chapters to really engross the reader into the book! You combined action and character development to great an interesting and flowing novel. I would certainly be interested to see the few chapters to see how the characters, Nicole in particular, develop. I think that one key area for improvement would be to break up the chapters into paragraphs...instead of writing the entire chapter as one long paragraph. Apart from that, I really enjoyed to mix of action and dialogue, and would love to see more of 'Dragon King for a Husband' in the future! Keep writing,
Inst1nctualWater