DesmondK

Anastasia

A very novel concept so far, it scares me to think of what this child will grow up to be.
I love your writing style, your descriptions are very good.
Well done so far.

Die for Love

This story starts with a bang, I love the way she is forced into a hostage situation within a public area without others becoming alerted to her true situation. It has me intrigued so far.
There are a few minor grammatical errors that will be picked up during editing if you don't get to them first.
The second chapter is extremely fast-paced, I got lost a few times with what you were attempting to articulate, but a quick re-read and I got them.
It is a fantastic story so far and something I can sink my teeth into but it needs a little work on the grammar, I can get over it, but it may be a sticking point for others.

Box of Bones

Although I only got to read the first five chapters the story itself is developing wonderfully.
I do get your disclaimer at the start with regards to this not being a final draught, but I do feel that the technical writing subtracts from the overall experience.

A Different Species

Great start, and then I was slowly pulled into the story.
Love the writing style and the slow approach to the character and story development.

Chapter two had a couple of sentences that need a little bit of rewording and in Chapter three you have used sac instead of sack, I don't know if it was intentional or not, but you have used sack in other parts.

In all, a great story.

The New Ways

I was pulled into the drama that the two characters were involved in straight away.
You created the urgency of their predicament well and I look forward to reading any other chapters you add, or when it is published.