The Useless Villain
This is funny, he is trying his best to be bad, but stuffing that up.
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I will keep reading over the next while as the chapters are easy to read and entertaining.
As some of the other reviews have pointed out there are a few grammatical errors but when you got to publication they should be picked up.
One tip that I have been given recently is in bringing a story more to life.
e.g. As the sun was behind my back at this time of the morning our shadows, both his and mine were visible, I brought forth a large, black form from his shadow behind him, that I quickly morphed into the shape of a large hand, knocking the man forward with a massive slap to his back. He toppled toward me like a bowling pin that had just gone down in a strike, he was out cold by the time his head hit the pavement for the second time, due to the bounce.
I know I have a different writing style to you but there may be something you can take from this example.
Just finished Chapter 3 and I like where it is heading, I loved the flashback and what it adds to the character development.