DizzleD

Toronto, Canada

🇨🇦 Canadian and Proud! 🇨🇦 I love everything Bollywood or Vampires/Witches. Favourite books: All Souls Trilogy by Deborah Harkness Working on: Editing On My Life And Death & writing The Eos Key.

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Enjoyable!

This was quite an enjoyable read. The characters are fun, there is lots of action and the descriptions definitely paint a picture of the scenario.

There are quite a few run on sentences and paragraphs, and some grammatical errors, but overall a great read. I do wish there was more info about who was narrating the story as that left me confused.

I would definitely try using a free program like ProWritingAid to help with the structure and grammar, but that's about all it would need.

I hope you write more like this, as I would have liked to read more about this unfortunate foursome (now threesome) in depth.

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A Creeper For Sure

The story keeps you wanting more! The chapters are just the right length and leave you wanting to read the next one. I do wish there was a little more background to the characters and that grammar and structure were checked throughout, but it's a great read.

This wasn't something I would normally read, but in the end, it was enjoyable!

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A Cool Concept

As a many have mentions, grammar needs to be checked. A simple free program like ProWritingAid would help with that. The plot is great, mixing fantasy with sci-fi, though I would like to know more about the background of the characters.

Overall a great start. I would recommend putting your work through a program and reposting it after checking it. I think you could get more reads and better reviews of you took the time.

Looking forward to part 2!

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A Sad Romance

This sad romance has me caught up! I have loved and lost and it feels a lot like what the character Kara is going through.

The idea that life can be the same after you lose the one you loved so deeply is just impossible and it has been protracted well in these few first chapters.

This is a great story, and I'm going to have to read the one before this to get my fill of the complete romance between Stefan and Kara.

Well done!

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Her Hidden Beast

I do like where this story is going. (got to chapter 5) and the development of the characters is coming on very nicely.

The grammar and punctuation throw me off, but that is easily fixed which is why I gave it the rating I did. There is a lot of potential and I think I'll have to read more to find out!

Well done.

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