E.D.Jonston

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Promising

The story is more concerned over the romance than it is with the plot for my tastes, as I prefer plot-driven stories. I recommend it for women who like idealized homosexual relationships (slash).

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An Amazing Ride

This is a great plot driven adventure. I recommend it for anyone who loves action/adventure science fiction. The description doesn't give it justice.

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A Well Intentioned Attempt

First, I want to commend the author for attempting to write a more comprehensive story that isn’t just dialogue with bits of description. I appreciate that because I don’t like this style of writing myself.

The problem is that there are too many grammatical errors, which makes it difficult to follow the story. One of the biggest grammar mistakes are run-on sentences. They are everywhere. Fixing this will go a long way in improving the story.

Also, you use too much direct exposition and not indirect exposition. I do want some natural dialogue between characters. This will help establish their personalities and relationships.

I suggest recruiting a friend to help. Good Luck - EDJ

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A nostalgic adventure

If I were to sum up the story in one word, it would be nostalgic. It harkens back to older fantasy traditions of sword and sorcery, but it is fresh and without cliches. It evoked the fall of the Roman empire without copy and there is little grandstanding or preaching. It personalizes epic events.

The narrative is split into two stories, both connected to each other despite not featuring the same characters.

I thoroughly enjoyed it and I can’t wait for more!

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A Classic Escapists Tale

This is a good YA book for teenage girls. It's the classic escapist tale about an ordinary teen girl who ends up in another world as a secret queen with magical powers.

Althogh entertaining, it bothered me that none of the teenagers were worried about their parents or siblings or the fact that they would never see them again.

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The Tsundere Dragon

A good sequel to the second book so far. Has a few problems with editing but nothing serious.. It keeps all old characters, while keeping the new area, and main characters, in focus. It introduces new magic and magical creatures, which is good. The male love interest is more charming this time because he is a bad boy/tsundere and I have a weakness for them.

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A Futuristic Romp

It's an interesting premise, a well-built world, and a good alternate history. However, it is pornographic. He spends a lot of time describing women's body parts. I suppose it's not a bad thing if that's what you're into, but I couldn't get past it.

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A good ride

A good story for those who like dragons and romance. One doesn't have to read the first book in the series to enjoy it. I liked the protagonist, she was both strong and vulnerable. No one in the ensemble got lost in the narrative.

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So far so good

I've made it to chapter 18, and judging from the overall tone of the story, I feel confident giving it a general review...

Update: I've updated my review after chapter 25. This was a promising story, which went completely off the rails when the author decided to use it as anti-religious propaganda.
If you want to add a pill in the story, slather it with plenty of jam.

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