Emma McMillan

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Amazing

I hope that you will continue with the story! I feel like the two chapters are not enough to satisfy my curiosity. I would really like to know why Raven killed the Beta's mate and why she wasn't sorry? The few stories I've started to read here on inkitt have been rushed and lacking in grammar as well as a few sentences that don't add up. Your story is the first that does not rush and everything flow well, there are some places that could use better terms, and there's little to no grammar mistakes; my guess is that this isn't your ruff draft. When I first started reading there are some things that I don't understand like how she get turned around in her cell to face the window? Might I suggest elaborating on that; as well as the part where she cause self inflicted licks? Whiplashes? or another term is flogging.

Its really amazing and I hope you continue with the story!

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