I've been writing for a long time, but now I've decided to share. Please keep in mind that English is not my first language! I love to work with readers, so if you have any wishes, please let me know!

Valoraci贸n general
Estilo de escritura
Gram谩tica y puntuaci贸n

Interesting story so far

The story is intriguing so far, but I personally don't like the style of writing, with the You-perspective. But I guess that's just personal taste. Also, the past tense leads to some mistakes from time to time, forgetting it and jumping to the present, but it can be ignored.
There are some words that shouldn't be there and some " missing, but other than that, I'm curious to see where this is going. At this point, it's a bit too rapey for me, I hope this will change.

Leer la historia ya

Todav铆a no hay listas de lectura

Todav铆a no ha recibido ninguna insignia

Sobre nosotros

Inkitt es la primera editorial del mundo impulsada por los lectores y que ofrece una plataforma para descubrir talentos ocultos y convertirlos en autores de 茅xito mundial. Escribe historias cautivadoras, lee novelas encantadoras y publicaremos los libros que m谩s gusten a nuestros lectores en nuestra app hermana, GALATEA, y otros formatos.