Luna Laurenzius

My live motto is let others live and dream yourself away.

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Good start

At first by only reading the summery it didn't really catch my interest but the first chapter caught my interest. I am a big fan of Vampires so it was a welcome surprise. I am curious to read the rest and see what will await me.
The writing style is good but sometimes a bit redundant in the wording. Still I enjoyed it.

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Like a Storm pulling ke in

The beginning is great it's well written and very exciting to read. I like how you portrait the characters and introduce them. There are some minor things I noticed by the grammar. But it didn't bother me while I read. All in all I would like to see more.

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Absorbing Work

The story was very thrilling to read and exiting also because it was full of action. I liked how the plottwist was predicted trough his dream but at the same time it made it a bit to predictable for me. I noticed nothing in terms of Grammer and Spelling. The writing was realistic but could be in some more details at some parts especially when it comes to the traumatic experiences of the Main Character. I was pretty much absorbed into the story but when the exact feelings and emotions I could be absorbed even more putting my mind fully into the perspective of the Main Character.
Those are the only things I personally would criticise otherwise there is nothing I have noticed. I hope it helps.
Sincerely,
Luna

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Everything has a begin

I really like the idea of this stories and am interested to find out how the story will continue. For my taste there was to much language used in teenage slang but that is just my personal preference. The only thing that bothered me while reading was that often two words were written together without a space wich made it hard to read and sopped me in my reading flow.
Besides that I liked it and found the start interesting. I am curious to see how the story will continue.
Best wishes,
Luna

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Wonderful Poems

I very much enjoyed reading those poems. They were beautifully written even though they cover in parts some darker feelings. Still I enjoyed them.

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Confusing but well written

First of all the story is well written. At some parts the changing point of view between the killer and the Main Character confused me, because their characters are written with many similarities. And I wasn't sure if the point of view is truly changing at least in the begin.
Besides that I found the plot very interesting at some points it could have some more depths like the emotions of the main character her jealousy and her other reactions to the world around her were described but could have some more detail to be even more realistic.
I hope it helps,
Luna

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Capturing plot

This story is very capturing. It's well written and exiting to read. Some parts are clich茅 and classic, what isn't a bad thing per say but it can get predictable on the long run. Still it's written in a way that makes everything together exiting and I look forward to how the story unfolds.

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Everything has a begin

I really like the idea of this stories and am interested to find out how the story will continue. For my taste there was to much language used in teenage slang but that is just my personal preference. The only thing that bothered me while reading was that often two words were written together without a space wich made it hard to read and sopped me in my reading flow.
Besides that I liked it and found the start interesting. I am curious to see how the story will continue.
Best wishes,
Luna

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