EverythingxPretty

Toronto, Ontario

Hey guys! Check out Book 1 of The Mafia Leader's Girl; (On Wattpad with OVER 630K READS and now on Inkitt!) Book 2 is in progress and released on Wattpad AND NOW ON INKITT! Happy reading! ❤️

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Bravo!

MISS GIRL—

I can't begin to tell you how amazing this story is so far! I really thought the story was going to start off slow, but it really captured my attention from the start. There are a few spelling errors, but I won't hold you accountable over that, LOL. Only because I understood what you actually meant.

In all, you are a fantastic writer and I honestly can't wait to read the rest of your story! Keep up the magnificent work love!

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Good, but could be better

Honestly from my perspective;

It's good smut, but it just needs work! I know it's exciting to write your first story because the ideas are just over flowing, but it'll make the story 10 times better if you just add punctuations and breaks in your paragraphs (4-8 lines). Right now it's just running sentences. Add names to your characters and possibly describe your characters features (optional). It helps give the readers a mental picture.

If it helps, jot down your ideas on a piece of paper or somewhere on your phone/laptop where you know you wouldn't lose those ideas. You can take your time to write your story, while adding everything accordingly. If you need any help or advice, I'll be here to help as best as I can!

Overall, keep up the good work! You'll be a pro in no time.❤️

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