F.H. Blake

Interesting

I must say this is an interesting piece of work. The first chapter immediately got my attention, but the second chapter was a little short. All in all I think it's a pretty good start with a lot of room for character development. I like the setting of the story and can't wait to find out more about the teenagers and what they do. The writing style is excellent and I don't see many grammar or spelling errors. Keep writing.

Cute, funny and enjoyable

I have completely fallen in love with this story. It feels like something you'd read in The Tales of Beedle and the Bard or a children's book, but it is quite enjoyable for adults as well. There are a few grammar mistakes here and there, but nobody is perfect and I think this is beautifully written.

Enjoyable

I enjoyed this very much, and can't wait to read more. You've pricked my interest, and I can't wait to see where the story goes. It's wonderfully written and easy to follow, but maybe a few more details in this chapter? Expand it a little and it'll be amazing. Can't wait for more.

Gripping and exciting

I loved it. I really love your character's voice and I can't wait to read more. It seems like he has an interesting back story and I love the concept. Your writing style is amazing and I was instantly gripped by the story. Keep writing, it is amazing.

Review

Very interesting idea.It makes me want to read more to understand the plot line, but it is very interesting. A good interesting. I'll be reading this, most definitely. Would like to see the characters established, but it is really good and I can't wait for more.