I love the plot of this short story. With the few words that you have written I have fallen in love with your story and it has connected with my heart. I like your creative ways of explaining things and connecting the story together. I have noticed that you have very few grammar mistakes which is great, however I have noticed that you do not stick to a tense in your writing. Like past, present and future tense. You can jump from present to past tense in one sentence. Which is not a bad thing you just have to make sure that the sentence lines up and makes sense. Overall I love the way you write and I like the story very much and I'm sorry if I came off as rude. There is nothing wrong with your writing it's very inspiring and very passionate. Just get someone to check over your grammar. Please keep writing I would love to see more from you and I will happily check out you other books.
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