Fractoluminescence

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o.O

I like the way you put exaclty the same number of lines for good and evil, and the paradox you kept putting forward. Was a good idea to introduce all of that by talking about a double-sided blade

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Calming

Very pretty! A bit more rythme and it would be perfect.

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A bit like me

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plot -> up to here it sounds a bit more like a statement than actual action, so I kind of have to judge randomly... The theme is one I have experinced though, thus I am kind of sensible to it. I know I didn't feel that way about it though.
You have a good writing style, there just nothing particuarly special about it (or so I think). It's, as I said, a bit like a statement, without much connotation behind it. But the style will develop as the story goes on anyway, so...
For the writing skills, there is just one mistake: 'my live' that I noticed, so...

Good luck writing on

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