I really enjoyed the action! It gave me chills. It wasn't too long or too descriptive, which was nice. But there were some aspects that I didn't particularly enjoy.
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First off, I saw no character change in either of the main characters. One second Kevin dislikes Natasha, and then he's in love with her. Not saying someone has to change constantly, but he's a person with severe trauma. I would have loved to see something more gradual instead.
Second off, WHY would he fall for Natasha? There are honestly no redeeming qualities about her. She's annoying, self-centered and doesn't see her own faults. ALL the women are like this throughout the book, and as a woman, it's kind of annoying. It was like a gaggle of girls instead of just a couple of people who happen to be women.
Third, let's talk sexual trauma. No one - and I mean NO ONE - can talk about their own rape with such nonchalance. There are those in denial, those who hardly remember because they block it out 'cause trauma, and those who remember and suffer psychological side effects. Natasha would be the third, but she No, I don't know all about this topic, I'm not an expert, but I have heard too many horror stories, and you honestly speak about it as if you've never heard of it. It's a very tentative topic, and it could be almost seen as an insult to those who have suffered because of it. Natasha was brutally gangraped and she has absolutely NOTHING to say about that? Please do your research if you wish to add these themes into your books. This also does not mean there has to be a trauma arc, it just means be more sensitive.
Last, grammar. There were some recurring mistakes throughout the book, such as switching between calling Natasha Tasha, and that was confusing because it was so random. There are also instances where you put "he is" and it would have been much better to have "he's", or "they are" where there should be "they're." This would have made reading it more fluid. There were a couple of grammatical errors throughout, but overall it wasn't enough to dissuade me from reading.
I did really like the plot, I think it's interesting and could go somewhere, but it was somewhat uncomfortable with my second and third points. It could be a lot better and has potential.