Couldn't get very far
As someone else pointed out, it would be a good graphic novel/manga because there's so much description with the action. That coupled with the fact that it was written in really long paragraphs made my attention wander eventually and I couldn't get that far. I also did comment on how fast paced it was. I couldn't get attached to the characters and couldn't understand their reasoning for making the decisions that they made. There was no adjustment period for Toby, I feel he kind of went from his previous looks to his new looks and he was instantly fine. Especially with the part where he was self harming, it was clear he was deeply struggling with himself and how he looked, and then he jumped to this new body type and he was instantly like "wow, okay now let's see what needs to be done" and that wasn't addressed. Overall, it has a really unique concept that I like.
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