Anna Pearl

Abnormal, has an unusual love for frogs, writes way too much. Thanks for reading!! <3

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When The Devil Smiles (by Lamis Hoteit

When The Devil Smiles is a really fun paranormal book full of angels with those pesky demons sprinkled in at those precise times that makes you rock back and groan while thinking both "I should have seen that coming" and "come on, stop believing the liar already." I loved what I read and I'm excited to review this knowing that the book may get more readers from it.

That said, I try to include a little constructive criticism and I do want to point out that there were some punctuation errors. It wasn't horrendous, but it was a little annoying at times and did take some of the thrill away from the story. I'd just like to say that being sure you paragraph properly and making sure your quotation marks are directly surrounding the spoken material would help the story a lot.

Now, just because there are punctuation errors doesn't mean you shouldn't go READ IT!! I love the angels and I love the different people and how they all care about the main character to an extent even though she feels broken, so great job!!

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Albatross: The Awakening (by Brittney R. Miller)

I usually love sci-fi, but I will say that the first chapters were filled with enough details to make it a little overwhelming. With all the different areas and such, it's almost necessary to have a map to keep it all straight. However, once you get to chapter 4 or so, things start making sense and you get wrapped up in the story.

Albatross is a brilliantly written book full of mystery and technology that transports you from earth to the alternate area this story is written from.. If you enjoy science fiction, you will almost certainly enjoy this book. Normally I try to give a bit of constructive criticism, but I can't think of anything to say other than the fact that sometimes it gets a little overly detailed and it gets confusing. Other than that, great job and I'm excited to see what happens to the book. I'm sure it's going far.

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Dear Bully, Dear Victim (By Rose Black)

So, first of all I want to say that the idea behind the story was really good. I loved the idea of both the bully and the victim writing letters that eventually get exchanged. It's meaningful and it makes me relate to it more because in my head, I write little letters to the people in my own life.

That said, I was a little confused by some of the parts of the book. The victim, Chloe, loves the boy who bullies her. While trying not to spoil anything, it brings me to wonder what Chloe's view on love is. Her family situation is severely lacking and in the end you see how twisted it is, but overall, I wished there was some more description. Although, I was impressed by how, without explaining things outright, the chosen words in the letters made them feel read and gave them an undercurrent of feeling. Even though you weren't given a front row seat, if you're looking for feeling, it's there.

Understandably, it's hard to describe things in letter form without sounding like you're droning on and I'm certainly not asking Rose Black to change her whole story, but there are a few things that could be improved in future stories. If I'm critiquing the letters, I don't even know what I would say because the letters themselves were spectacular. I loved them even though the topic was alarming.

One last note is the fact that the epilogue is written in point of view rather than in letter form. It's really hard to jump from one to another like that, so adding some point of views to Alex's and Chloe's letters (like how they felt as they wrote them) would help bridge the gap.

All in all, it was a good story. I'd recommend it to people who need things to relate to or want to feel something. I would say that anyone who is sensitive to bullying and depression should NOT read this book because that's basically the focal point.

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Dark Shadow

Whoah. Just... oh my goodness, the plot... I love it so much. I want to note that sometimes it was super confusing with the paranormal creatures because there wasn't a lot of description for the actual paranormal creatures, but I loved the plot and the different characters and I read the WHOLE THING in one sitting, so I feel like if that doesn't say testaments to the writing, nothing does. Another thing I LOVED about the chapters were that there were little poems at the beginning of each chapter and those were so good!! I was super excited to keep reading!! I'm not sure that there's anything that I could really suggest that you improve on other than just reading through and fixing some minor grammar things, so I'm going to say great job and good luck with whatever else you might be writing!! :)

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Vengeance

Okay, so first of all, if you don't agree with anything I say about this story, I apologize, but there was only one chapter for me to read and get a good view of the story. But if you can keep an open mind, feel free to continue reading.

The story starts off kinda in the middle of the story almost, which helps it be more entertaining and it captures the readers' attention, but it would get their attention so much more if you could try to add some background details like background or description of the area or who the character saw. I'm not saying what is there currently isn't good because it IS and I enjoyed it a lot, but I'm trying to provide a few (hopefully helpful) tips in this review as well as giving an overview of sorts.

The main character, Lexi Green, is cool. She's sassy and she doesn't back down from people leering at her, which is pretty epic because I would DEFINITELY shy away from that. Now, it'd be cool if you described her expression more because what's better than a girl ignoring her boss's lewd glances? A girl inwardly flipping that guy off as the pretends to ignore the glance. That would definitely help Lexi achieve the title 'badass.'

Now, the plot isn't very established (as it nearly never is in chapter 1) so I can't say much about it, but I will say, if you added a few teaser details to her mission, like explaining how the things her boss gave to her were arranged or felt or made Lexi feel, that would make the reader really want to read the next chapter.

All that said, I may be ENTIRELY wrong about the author's style of writing, so feel free to ignore my tips. Maybe you meant to write it exactly like you did and don't want to change it. That's your choice as the author of a work. That said, I really enjoyed chapter one and it reminded me of my own book in progress, so I think it would be cool seeing you add the details I described.

All in all, what I saw of Vengeance was REALLY GOOD and I hope to see more soon!! :)

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Yuki Yuki

Yuki Yuki is a very cute story with a lot of potential. It's of a few different people's lives and they wind into each other's views in different ways.

What I will mention is that there were a lot of easily remedied errors such as missing commas or paragraphs that need to be broken up. I will say that the characters are very cute and believable, but separating the paragraphs into different people's descriptions or what they're saying will help the story read better.

Also, if you are doing more than one person's POV (point of view), try to mark that person's POV. I've been using hyphens and the person's name and putting them in bold to set it off from the story. Now, all constructive criticism aside, I enjoyed reading this and will definitely try to pop in when the author adds more.

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First to the Grave (by A. Pancho)

Okay, so first of all, I didn't realize how weird it would be reading a book about the zombie apocalypse of sorts during Covid-19, because the fact that it was a zombie virus really hit me hard. It definitely helped me feel it a lot more and I realized that the people were really realistic and that it was just harder to see because I'd never been in a position where my family got killed by zombies.

On another note, there are a few errors in the punctuation, but they're very minor. If the reader is very careful in their reading, they'll see the errors, but for the most part, they're fine. It's mostly just a couple of periods instead of commas and accidentally misplaced quotation marks. In the grand scheme of things, it's only a tiny bit scattered here and there.

Just as a bit of constructive criticism, try spacing things out a bit more. You can put what someone says in the same paragraph as something they do, but if they stop doing that and do a different action, consider making a new paragraph or phrasing it so that it's not confusing. Also, the bold isn't necessary for quotation and that made it really hard to read. It would help a lot to have all that bold gone.

Now, I really like this story because zombies are fun and the description of said zombies is gruesome and I enjoy that kind of stuff in some weird way. This is a really good book that only slightly marred by a couple of grammatical errors and the slightest bit of a repetitive plot. A couple of twists other than continuous zombies would improve that tremendously and seeing as though I haven't read through all the chapters, I can't say that you didn't do that later on.

All in all, I'm totally going to read more and I believe this writer is going places someday. Keep writing and never give up. Great job.

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Awakening (by Onyx_Quill)

First of all, wow. I love the details and you really did a masterful job with them because they didn't feel like they were being spat at me faster than I could take them in. The descriptive language was specific and it made it so easy to imagine the place. I was blown away by the sheer amount of technical equipment and loved the description of it all. To be entirely honest, I wish we were that technically advanced. Unfortunately, we are not and I shall have to wait a long time before we get even close to that.

Now, the plot was hinted at in the beginning and I was surprised by the fact that it opened with a robot or cyborg of sorts rather than with a human (just to hint at it, those others reading this. I'm not spoiling it for you. Go read it yourself haha). I also liked how you proceeded to show a human as the main character in the next chapter. There is not just one main character, which can help develop your world a lot better.

Normally, I try to provide a bit of constructive criticism in my reviews but... I don't really know how you could improve this. It was amazingly detailed and I didn't find any obvious punctuation errors or typos that annoyed me. It came across very directly but not like it was unloading information on you and it made you feel like you were a part of the world that was being told. I honestly can't find anything wrong with this. That's not to say other people won't, but I can't give you any constructive criticism for errors that I didn't find.

All in all, I was blown away by the world you've created and I love the characters that I've read about. You did a great job and I definitely got the sci-fi vibe because it basically radiates it. It's awesome. This was definitely worth a read. Great job!

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How to Love (by Kali Lynn)

Oh. My. Goodness. I loved this so much. I know I'm not usually one for this kind of book, but this story is something else. If you asked me what exactly I love about it, I don't even think I could tell you. My answer would have to read it yourself and guess.

Now, I usually try to add some constructive criticism, but uh... I may have forgotten that I wasn't reading it for fun? Looking back on the story, I would say that maybe try to mix in the album part in a bit better because I did get a little confused there. It might be better as a prologue of sorts, but that also may not fit your idea for the story.

All in all, I love love LOVED it and I can't wait to see the story continue.

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His Love (by Noya_Avery)

This is a very cute short story that was built off of a book (or series, I don't know) that I did not read, but I will say that for those who are very particular about their punctuation and grammar, this would be a VERY hard read. I appreciated the dialogue and I especially liked the main female character and her slight development, but there are some serious punctuation errors and it needs a little bit of work. All in all, though, if you're looking for a cute short book to read and don't mind what was mentioned above, I'd definitely recommend it.

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Mommy's Lil' Angel (by Chere Taylor)

The mystery of this book starts as soon as you start reading. Just like there are those books that have a bit of a dragging first chapter, there are opposites that start up and you can't put it down. Mommy's Lil' Angel is definitely like that.

Now, unfortunately, a plotline doesn't make a story. I do have to point out that separating the huge paragraphs would definitely make it easier to read. Also, there were a few minor errors such as not using italics to set off a thought (let's be honest, who doesn't miss that stuff sometimes?) and not quite using the correct punctuation.

That said, the book is incredibly written. Even with the grammatical errors, I was hooked. I'm usually annoyed by the grammar issues, but I kept reading and reading and I only noticed them every once and a while. I actually ignored some just because I was so busy reading that I couldn't be bothered.

All in all, I look forward to seeing what happens when this story gets continued.

Keep writing, Chere Taylor. You've done amazing.

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Into the Mist (By Haskinauthor)

First of all, I want to say that anything sci-fi is usually a favorite of mine, so this review won't be entirely objective (not that any of them really are.) Second, as someone who compares things I've read, this got placed next to The Lunar Chronicles in my mind, so this got criticized a bit more than it would've had it been in a genre that I didn't read as much of.

I really enjoyed the fact that it was a rehabilitation facility of sorts, but (of course) there were some pretty epic plot twists that I won't describe because of spoilers, but they were amazing. If you're looking for a good science fiction read that won't take you through 50 chapters of descriptions of machines and computers, then this one is a good short read.

However, even though the book is marked as complete, it leaves off on a cliff hanger. I haven't heard a reply from the author as to whether or not this is the real ending, but I was disappointed that it ended where it did. I felt that it wasn't quite finished and that there were loose ends that I was trying to figure out. I didn't give the book a four star review because it didn't deserve that even with the ending being a little lacking, but I want to emphasize that part.

All in all, I wasn't bothered by whatever grammatical errors that might be in the book, which is saying something. I don't dig right down into the tiny things, but I can say that there weren't any missing periods or quotation marks. If I were to recommend a few science fiction books on here, I'd definitely put this book on the list.

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Trials (by Crixi)

First of all, I want to say that this book definitely wasn't my usual cup of tea. I read paranormal fiction books on a regular basis, but this one was something else. The prologue was interesting, but as soon as you reached chapter 1 it was a new story all of it's own. It wasn't all magic, it wasn't all blood, it was a family and it was confusing and NEW. That's so amazing to see that I thought it should be mentioned.

As I was reading, I kept looking for grammatical errors, but either I missed them or there weren't any because I didn't notice anything. (Although, maybe I was just very engrossed in the book?)

Some of the parts I skimmed because I didn't feel comfortable reading the sheer detail of those parts, so be warned that this book lives up to the age rating. Other than that, though, I was entertained and thrilled by what was happening. Trials is a really good book. Great job, Crixi!

One thing I would ask, sometimes Lara seemed stiff. If you managed to find a way to make her feel more emotional, that would be great. There were parts where you hinted at some more emotion like panic, and I really enjoyed that part. If it isn't possible, I understand. It's a hard box to fit and you did it almost flawlessly.

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Short Poems (by Cupofteayeon)

As I read this, I couldn't help but think about it's relatability to my own life. There were a few chapters that were my favorite and a few that I liked slightly less, but none that I had to suffer through. All the poems and songs were REALLY GOOD. I can't honestly think of a way to make it better (although when I was reading I TOTALLY forgot that I was going to be writing a review. Whoops.) If you like poetry and want to feel something while you're reading it, definitely check this 'book' out. I can't wait to finish the rest!

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Assassin Age: Big Bad Wolf (by DarkPheonix2000)

I love the plot of the book, but there were a few things that I kept finding that made it a little bit harder to enjoy the book. The book is written in first person POV, but you don't really get to see inside of Kylie's head. You see what she sees, but you don't get the emotion. It makes it feel like a story written in third person because of the lack of thoughts and emotions, but it is written in first person.

Another thing is that sometimes there's a teeny tiny error in the punctuation. Some paragraphs that start with someone speaking are missing quotation marks or sometimes something is written with a comma in the wrong spot. The only reason that DarkPheonix2020 got four stars out of five for punctuation is because I don't like any errors in my reading work. As far as errors go, there weren't that many, so I appreciate that.

I love the story, but it's definitely missing something that sucks you in. There's all the action, but there's nothing inside Kylie's head. I think with a little more of something else, whether detail or more emotion, the story could be a really good one. I can't wait to see the rest of the story because all in all, Dark Pheonix2000 did a great job.

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Loathing Ryan (By Victorious)

As far as romance stories go, Loathing Ryan was REALLY good. I started it two days ago and read it through all my spare time. After the first few chapters, I was hooked. The plot was good and the characters were realistic and engaging. I do have to point out that I'm generally critical with grammar issues and I did come across a few minor problems (such as missing punctuation or punctuation where there shouldn't have been any), but overall, I was amazed by the quality of the book. Victorious's writing style is engaging and makes you feel like you're looking through the character's eyes. There were a few minor detail problems, but as proved by the comments section, Victorious quickly fixed them. If I got to choose whether or not this book got published, I'd say one more read through and it could be good to go!

All in all, this story was a definite hit for me. I look forward to reading the sequel.

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