Solid plot ideas minus some formatting that needs some review
Okay so I think I agree with some of the other reviews in that I think it's a little dialogue heavy. However you have really well rounded characters and you obviously have thought out how they fit into your plot.
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The idea/originality is really cool. I like the idea, it's not something I've read a thousand times which I feel like is really important.
When you describe actions, maybe go a little more in depth. I remember a part reading "walked in like she owned the place" (paraphrasing) maybe unpack that a little bit and do a little more digging for a broader description.
Also, character thoughts, motives and backstories are a great way to avoid the dialogue heaviness. (I'm guilty for too much dialogue, you're not alone here) but the way over found to avoid it is through the above tricks.
Great writing! 👍