Grace Harding

hi there! My name is Grace and I have a passion for writing! Check out my wattpad account Night-Eye for more stories of mine!

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B R I L L I A N T

I am thoroughly enjoying this story so far, from the characters to the plot! I really REALLY like the fact that you also decided to write the story in the villan's POV as we are able to see the other side to the story and understand the pain Nova has gone through and therefore we (the readers) are able to cheer her on and understand her pain and suffering she went through.

The foundation for your plot seems to be very strong, the only downside is that I feel it's slightly cliché with the whole fire and ice idea, but to be fair, it works best for this type of story. You wouldn't have earth and fire because that literally makes no sense lol, so I really do think that even though it is a bit cliché, it is very promising!

I also just what to say that I am slightly worried by the speed the story is moving at, I don't know if you'll hit a writer's block, unsure if what to write, but you know what's best - after all, you are the author to this wonderful story!

Apart form that, there is one last thing I want to point out, I would really love some more description of the characters. We learn a lot about what Nova looks like, but hardly anything about Alexander or his girlfriend. It would be brilliant to have that description because otherwise the characters are just a blob in my brain and I can't tell what they look like etc. I hope this makes sense!

Finally, I just want to say that I really love your style of writing! There were times when I felt shocked by Nova and her antics, and other times when I felt like an emotional baby, before finally cracking up at small sections throughout. I really do think you'll be able to go far with a bit of editing etc - but save that until AFTER you have finished writing so you don't ruin your creative streak.

Oh and by the way, just in case you didn't gather, I FRIDGING LOVE YOUR COVER 😍😍😍

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BLOWN AWAY

Wow, okay, this book is absolutely amazing! I've only read the first chapter so far but I can already tell this book has a very professional written feel to it, from the characters to the writing style. It is all amazing!

I just want to say that first of all, the plot line is so unusual, it's brilliant! The characters are so relatable as well and I felt that during the car chase, that I was in the car with Jeff and his sister Becca! It felt AWESOME!

The humor is also brilliant. I found myself laughing so hard reading just the first chapter because of the whitty character remarks and funny situations they were found in too. So I really REALLY recommend this story to anyone who wants a bit of humour and something different form the rest!

The only think I'd really say is that maybe you could upgrade the cover? I like the cover you have now, however, I feel that the text could be better bad it could be more interesting overall, it did make me wonder if the writing was going to be good or not, but it really isn't a big deal, and besides, the say not to judge a book by the cover... But a good cover does help. However, that isn't important and I'm guessing that if you do publish this story (I suggest doing so in future) then you'll probably get a professional cover anyway. (Aka, this is me just nitpicking really).

Aside form that, the only thing I'd say about the writing is the head hopping. This is a big pet peeve of mine when it comes to writing (yes, I've done it too, but a friend here on inkitt told and explained to me why it's bad and now I dislike it too lol) as it jumbles the reader up and confuses them. You did it a total of twice in one chapter. From the girl at the start, to Jeff and then to his sister for a bit. STICK TO ONE HEAD ST A TIME. this way, the reader is able to settle into a characters head. It's like getting a bucket of ice water thrown over your head when you head hope because suddenly the reader is left feeling scrambled and have to quickly realign themselves to settle into someone else's head. I hope this makes sense.

Apart form that, ABSOLUTELY AMAZING! I really was blown away by your skilled writing!

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I'm in LOVE

I absolutely LOVE the whole concept of what you have written for this story!

The plot seems pretty unique and from the chapters I have read, I can safely say, that this plot is a very origional idea! What I also love is how the author talks about the realistic side of love and that it isn't all sunshine and rainbows as one might say, so this was also a very big green tick!

Not only that, but the way you portrayed Lacey in the second chapter was brilliant because as the reader, we immediately see her flaws and I think this is VERY important for when writing a story as there is no such thing as a perfect human, we all have flaws and I think as an avid author and reader, it is very important to demonstrate those flaws to the reader to show them that the character is just like them, so yet again well done!

However, linking to the characters, I was disappointed with the lack of character description. There were so many ways you could have entangled description in, and yet, in the chapters I read, I couldn't find any except for a bit about the man Lacey bumps in to (who I am also already shipping with). The man (I don't want to be a spoiler) is shown to be very handsome, which all readers can appreciate, so I am hoping as the two grow closer, we'll get to see some of his flaws.

I also think that the opening chapter should be changed slightly to create a hook for the reader. There isn't anything overly exciting that makes the reader desparate to read on, which was a bit of a bummer, so I think that could definitely be improved on (perhaps a prologue of Lacey and her ex?) And it should be something exciting or/and something that leaves the reader questioning and wondering, therefore embedding the urge to continue reading.

Not only this, but you also head hopped in the second chapter which is one of my biggest pet peeve about writing. It is basically where you hop from one character's brain to another unnecessarily. If you NEED to do this, do it in a seperate chapter. When you swapped from Lacey's pov to the Marcus's, it not only confuses the reader causing them to have to scramble to get seated comfortably again, but it reveals things that you shouldn't include, like how another person is feeling (in this case). One of the best thing about writing a novel is keeping the reader in suspense and you do this one way by preventing the reader from knowing what another person is thinking about the MC (main character). But don't worry, we all do this, but just be aware of it in future!

I also just want to mention that you don't have to put speech and dialect in italics. That should really be saved for a character's thoughts or a word in a conversation that is being stressed. I really advise you to look at books because you see that no books do this and if you want to get published (which I am assuming you do) you'll have to change that.

Apart from this, there were just a few grammar mistakes like spelling and punctuation, but we all do this, so don't get too worried about it until you come round to editing it. There were also just a couple of sentences I found that could be changed round to make a bit more sense, e.g. "I asked Taylor he had eaten" —> "I asked Taylor IF he had eaten." It's things like this which just help to make the story flow better.

Apart from that, I think this novel is off to a brilliant start! Don't give up as it has amazing potential and I'm excited to see how far you go!

~ Grace

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It's off to a good start!

I enjoyed reading the couple of chapters you have written so far and although I haven't been able to discover loads about the story so far, I really do think it is off to a good start!

However, I think there are a few things I think you can improve on: a better cover, because whilst the one you have got now stands out well, I think it would do better with maybe having a couple on the front or something that is a bit more interesting or intricate, however, that is totally your call. I recommend (as a writer who has been writing for seven years) making a mood board of all the covers you get inspiration from, whether it be on Google or Pinterest, and then you are able to make the perfect cover.

Another thing is that I've noticed a couple of spelling mistakes including "fly's" instead of "flies", but everyone makes mistakes! You say you use grammarly, however, as a somewhat experienced writer, I feel that you should reread your chapters thoroughly, but ultimately, mistakes will be made which is fine! That's why beta readers are so good!

One more thing is that in the second chapter, there was a section of dialogue which was rather confusing to read between the boy and the girl as it was all in one paragraph. When writing, it is always better to seperate the speech and dialogue so it is a lot easier to read.

One final note is that I would love to have a lot more description of the characters and the setting, which will also help to lengthen your chapters and help the reader to be put in the scene because I'm struggling to picture it and the characters. I hope this makes sense.

Over all though, I think you have good potential

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Love itttttt

I started reading this a while ago and am about half way through and can I just say, I am LOVING this story! The plot, the characters and writers craft are all so brilliant and I immediately got dragged in after reading the first line of this fantastic novel! My only worry is that it seems to have a couple of clichés (don't want to say what so I don't spoil it!) But in all honesty, most romance and young adult novels seem to have some element of cliché so it isn't a big deal! In all honesty, I think it makes the story more fun and cute!

I definitely recommend it to anyone who lives romance with a splash of cliché align with a whole bucket of originality!

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It's off to a promising start!

Okay, I recently picked up this book because I though, why not? The cover is cool and it sounds interesting, and I was right! The description of the story is very good and I am excited to read future updates that the author has in store!

What really stood out to me was how unusual the plot was and the setting! It is really exciting to read and I'm already rooting for Raven (especially after learning how badass she is) and ***** (don't want to spoil it!!) Do I do recommend giving this a try if you're into sci-fi and romance!

However, I was slightly worried that the book was going to have cliché elements, like I'm getting the sense that this has a twist on werewolves and mates, and the guy seems rather protective over her already and I know that the mate bond is supposed to make you really attracted to the other person, but I felt like it was happening to soon? I don't know really since my knowledge is rather limited when it comes to werewolves, but in the second chapter ( I believe) you mention that she gave a lustful gaze at the boy, but I feel like because she is human, she wouldn't be doing things like that because as the boy suggested, she won't understand. Also, the fact that she is so strong and emotionless is another cliché for me, I don't know if that is just me or if others have experienced it, but in my opinion it is. So I just hope that there will be an added twist to it in future and that we will see the girl's weak side and vulnerable side so that not only does she seem human, but also that she is relatable.

Another thing I love about this book is the hunger games and divergent aspect I feel like you are entwining, both books are amazing and I've always wondered what it would be like to combine the two into one story, and I feel like this hits the mark! However, make sure to not make this story too similar as that would basically be copying which is a no no XD.

There were unfortunately quote q few grammatical errors, whether it was mixing up your with you're etc, but some of them were just typos and we've all done that! So don't stress too much, but make sure to fix them when it comes to the editing stage xx

With all this said, I still have high hopes for the author and I'm expecting it to get a little bit saucy since it is 18+ which isn't necessarily my type of thing, but hey ho! Keep up the amazing work!

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My all time favourite!

Ugh, I cannot get enough of this book!!!! It's absolutely perfect! It used to be on wattpad before they were stupid enough to take it down (I still think everyone who was jealous of Holly's magnificent writing took over to take it down) but I'm so so glad it's up on inkitt now!!!! I cannot wait to re read it and relive the memory!!! AHHHH I'm so excited to start reading it!!!! I swear, if none of you fall in love with this book, y'all don't have a heart!!!!

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