Grant Ayers

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I'm a young author with a published book. You can check out "The Inevitable War" at Amazon or at Dorrance bookstore

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Sorry

I couldn't tell who or what was talking so this made the plot of the story a little confusing to read. There was no quotes around the dialog and just so many misspelled words and no commas where they needed to be.
Okay, that's enough bashing on the writer. Because this is obviously a free book that she poured hours of her time on. So I will say a few nice things about this book. 1 the book for the most part had a pretty good plot with great character arcs. 2 you can tell and really think about the actions that are in the books. 3 the background descriptions were perfect.

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Loved the twists

This is a story that kept me on my toes. Now it's a short story that felt like a whole movie. Oh and that twist at the end there wasn't something I expected. Like it was a whole moment captured perfectly.

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Great

So I want to say that the story itself was great the author knew how to write and manipulate emotions through her characters. Sylvester was my favorite character out of everyone. But what the author struggles with is separating dialogue tags and maybe just thickening a few details of the story that I think I would love to see as a reader. But I would say that this book is a solid 4/5 stars. Because the dialogue tags made it very confusing who was talking and this made it harder to imagine the story. Oh, and the plot felt rushed and a little unclear. Because the train of emotion was, happy, sad, angry, happy, horny. In that order lol. but I'll be clear. If the author interacts with this review I'll bump it up to 5 stars because one author interaction is excellent and because maybe they can explain a few things for me. But in the meantime, you should for sure check this story out.

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Zombie hunting

I think it should be an action thriller instead of a horror. That's just my opinion. But as for why I think this book is a 4 star is because where the grammar was good very little personality and even emotion didn't shine through. It did for the first couple of chapters but then everything after chapter ten just lost all feeling to me. The dialogue became robotic and the monsters weren't that scary, plus the characters began to break character. But the scenery and the world itself was great to see through the eyes of the main character.

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Interesting concept

So the idea of the entire book is original and a very fun thing to think about. Imagine if your first love, your "first time" and blam have to marry that person. I was laughing because my friend had just told me about his first time and how he hated it. Lol. But I wish there were more of a reason why the law exists where you have to marry the first person you exchange a sexual experience with. With that said the formatting was terrible and the whole thing was just a big block of text. That could easily be fixed so I'm not going to rag on it too much.

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Ayaan

The main character is relatable and fun to read about. And just seeing how everyone interacts with him just gives an all-around cheery feeling you can tell that the author was having fun with this story. I liked the setting, the plot, and just the atmosphere of the book.

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I love the story

So I'm nearly done with the story. Well, what it has right now I'm nearly done with it. I'm on chapter five and right now it only has seven chapters. Maybe nine. But either way, I love that it switches pov and that there are some really good emotional moments within the book. If you read this author's other works (Which I totally recommend that you do) then you kind of get a feeling of the tone and the familiarity with some of the characters. Like with Claud it reminded me of Dani a little bit. But over the story was nice and I think you should check it out. It's not that long of a read and is just nicely written. There are a few hiccups with the dialog, but that's not a downside. I think you can read the book just fine with the little minor issue.

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🔥🔥🔥🔥

Not much to go off right now. Dialogue was rough but the speech was amazing to read. I felt inspired from this one chapter and I think I would love to read more. I can see this book hitting shelves of every home in the usa

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Cool

The story was magnificent. Gave off a dark feeling and some really good heart warming chapters. The story kept spiralling slowly into darkness as Alex gets poked and prodded from life. I've read up to the seventh chapter but I plan on finishing it. I'm surprised that it hasn't had more attention.

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bad ass cover

I love the cover, and the story, and saw very few mistakes to nit-pick about. I can see this book going places. Great job author. And sorry it took me so long to write a review.

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15 chapters in

I read up to fifteen chapters and I have to say other than the missing commas the author didn't miss a single thing when it came to this story. The characters are relatable and I thought the story was really sweet.

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Great begining

So the start of the book is very slowly paced and kinda stays stagnant right up till the end where things get the blood pumping. Burnt Froyo is funny and fantastic, and I loved reading every word. Even the misspelled ones. Lol.

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Great

So I've reviewed stories from one chapter to up to 90 and the similarity of the both of them is that every word is impactful in some way. I mean by this that the author has already shown us quite a bit with one chapter. Now it took me a week to get to it but now I have a regret. Lol. I should have read it sooner and I want to read more. I want to see these characters grow and show me a few twists. Oh, and before I continue, when I review stories, I base it on what I've read. So the grammar and writing style was good. I think that was truly extraordinary. But the plot is a 2 star because there is not a lot of plot to go off of as of right now. So with that said I think it's only fair to give it a two-star until the story grows. And I want to see that. Hopefully, this will be motivation.

P.s. I loved the story. I hope you continue writing. And that many readers get to see your imagination.

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Good Idea

So this whole thing is just his idea of what time is and how he views it. There is a quote and some other colorless points. And so there isn't a plot and it's complete by chapter 1. So, in my opinion, I think that the idea and his views are five stars. But when it comes to clarifying his viewpoint I think he could do better. Pull out more examples, more quotes, and just stretch your viewpoint a little so that it's understandable for someone who doesn't have the point of view. LIke I think time is something that we have in our grasp and that we don't just follow it. That we stand there and have a choice. To either follow it or make it into something amazing. And if this was your point or if I'm off topic then it's the writer for not clarifying. See what I mean? Like clarification and some more explaining and I think this would be a great little study for people to come to check out and maybe start up a conversation. Either way short and creative. Like it.

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I'm Batman

So I love the concept but there were just bricks of words and then the unseperated dialog and nearly any space. But with that said I would love to see more chapters instead you the author fixing the first chapter. Mainly only for one reason. Because like every single writer on this planet the more a person writes the better the writer. The more person edits the least amount of writing happens. But hey at least you'll be good at editing. LOL. What I'm saying is I want more chapters and your grammar could use a tad of tinkering.

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Go Nick

So I think the highlight of the entire story was chapter 4. Just because I love the descriptions. It was easy to read and If I'm correct it's still ongoing so if you're a reader this is your chance to influence the story in how it's written. Leave a comment and a like because this story is worth it.

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Loved it

Couldn't see anything wrong with the story. And hey if you want to argue about it read it and come back to me. But what I have to say about it is perfect characters, great emotional manipulation, and the background of the world is exactly what I wanted to imagine in a story.

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Wow

I liked it. It's short sure but it was the perfect day for a short story. I can't wait for more. This is what I love about inkitt. Is that you get to read a chapter a day and the author updates with fresh ideas. Love it and you as a reader should read this story as well.

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Bad Ass Read

I had fun reading the story. Truly the author has a gift for writing. As the characters were relatable and just amazing to read. Most of it was a movie inside my head as the descriptions were awesome and fluid. Amazing truly.

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Ok

I see why your other reviews are sorta speechless. Like the story itself was kinda stale but had its moments. Like a meh story. It kept me reading sure but not of interest but more because I was waiting for a little pizzazz. But we both know it comes and when it does I enjoy the heck out of it. So if your a reader then this one should be on your reading list.

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Good for one chapter

The beginning was great but with there only being one chapter there wasn't a lot to say about the book in a whole. Either way, you should read it you'll have fun.

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A harem story

So the story as far as I read makes me want to read it more. Only because I met the man named Andrew. The biggest douche in the world but yet I can see it ending with Weber in his arms. And just by reading a little fraction of what the story has the author showed me a world where this creative and strong woman meets all these different dudes and the interactions between the men and the main character made me burst out in laughter one of the best reads that I've had in a bit. Especially when it comes to romance.

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One Chapter Wonder

I loved reading this! I can't wait to find out what happens next. But putting everything in italics is off-putting. Overall it's a good start but it's way too early to review such a thing. More chapters, please.

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I laughted through the entire book

Not saying that this book is a joke. But for what is labeled a horror it was more like a dark comedy. Because the main character is so MESSED UP. Especially in the first two chapters. My favorite chapter in the book was chapter 6 and would tell everyone that if they can get there they struck gold. It's amazing to read the story and can't wait for it to be updated more.

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Edge of my seat worthy

I was thrilled to read this story. From the beginning to where the story is right now I was at the edge of my chair reading from my laptop just zooming through chapters. I think if anyone is interested in a fantasy/thriller they should hop on this book!

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Wait! I'll update this!

So off of the first chapter, it's needs editing. But I think I was warned that before reading this. So getting past all that I read this book as a reader. And what I thought was that I can't wait to read more chapters of this story. Because I honestly see this story reaching thousands of readers. It has potential out the ass in lamens terms.

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Not what it seemed

See when I first saw the cover I thought it was just going to be some sort of high school love triangle thing that I wasn't going to be interested in. But no this book blew my mind away with its badass fight scenes, cool characters, and a very brave female protagonist. There wasn't really one mistake that I saw reading it. Would 100% recommend it to any other person looking for a spectacular fantasy.

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Flawless

This story is fantasy. It's engaging, beautiful imagery, spectacular fight scenes, and spelling and grammar as far as that goes is just on point. This is a unicorn of stories. I think that if anyone has the time they should invest it in reading this story. I thought it was amazing to read it. Every second was just page turn after page turn. And the best part is that it's still going. I can't wait to read more chapters!

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Long but worth it

The story in itself is very long for the six chapters that it has. But while reading it I hardly noticed as chapter flew by one by one. It's an enticing book that deserves more readers.

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Good job

Didn't strike me interested but with that said good story for the right person

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Great story

Hey sorry for the lazy review but it's past midnight and I just got to the tenth chapter. Great and all and I hope the writer keeps doing their thing.

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😎👍

Great story but the blocks of text and the grammar kind of take you out of it. With that said I hope the story continues.

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Okay

So the beginning is hooking. I liked it even though it is terribly formatted and not even a little grammar editing was poured into the book I still found the experience and the character interesting. The main character is this snob who finds this married woman and is now obsessed with the idea of her rejecting him. I think it makes a good story I want more chapters and a little editing to happen and this story could be a five-star for sure.

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Great story

So,.. Great story with a few spelling mistakes. Go read the book.

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Doesn't feel like Harry Potter

So when I read fanfiction I want to feel that tone of the original still there. Like I just read some Batman fanfiction and it was like I read the comics of Batman. And so when I started reading this story I stopped on chapter one and went to read the first book of the Harry Potter series again. And once I did that I came back to this story and blitzed through the next six chapters and I will say that for not being professionally edited and being free I would say this story is a great four out of a five-star storybook. I want to see where the story goes but I think it could be a stand-alone series. The author has a lot of originally within this story that it doesn't feel or read like a Harry Potter book. Like Draco doesn't feel or read like Draco in the books. Honestly, I don't want to just drag this story through the mud because it's a clean and nice story. But with that said because it's a fan piece on the Harry Potter series it's hard to judge it. Because the original piece is out there and people have read it, liked it, and it's professionally famous. Like I think that if someone passed me this story and was like "Hey dude this story is cool. It's a fan fic of Harry Potter and I think it was cool. Read it." I would be like "Oh okay then." And then read it and put it down the first chapter I was in it. One is because of the huge info dump at the start. You don't need that. Because people only read fan fics of books that they have already read. So you didn't need that in there to provide that kind of information. Plus another thing that the author struggles with is they tell rather than show. This gets better as you read the story, she cuts that out real quick but for the first three chapters, it was a big problem. But you should read the story because the plot is a good one for what it is. Sorry that this was a long review for 7 chapters worth. But I just had a lot to say and it's all my opinion. So please don't take this to heart. And Keep writing author. And for those who are reading this as a casual reader go ahead and check it out.

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Original

So the plot is original in itself. I definitely haven't heard of a vampire story where the vampire's origin is that of a nuclear war. So that in itself is amazing. Now, this is where I start saying a few things wrong about the book so please keep in mind it's a free still ongoing story. So the first three chapters the dialogue tags were weird it was as if you were reading a screenplay instead of a novel, this gets fixed around chapter 4 and then keeps a steady pace till chapter six where it feels like the author was experimenting with their dialogue. Meaning that the characters themselves felt unconcise. Now here are some good things about the story that I liked. One of the main characters is awesome and powerful. I love reading a story where the main character is "buffed" Like she didn't have a six-pack and huge biceps but like she was strong and just had a huge moral dilemma with killing people. Perfect character 100%. Now the side characters were all meh. They were just kinda there to be a part of the story. Like they were as important as a building in a story. It's there to serve one purpose and that is to fill space. And the scenes were great, very descriptive. I think people should read this story because of its originality, and creativity, and to go along the process and help this author. I see potential in it because as I read I kept seeing improvements in the writing itself. Which kudos author!

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Grand love at it's finest

Why Can't I Be Your's is a book that any romance nut would love to pick up and read. Now I didn't like the few cliche that the story used but otherwise would say is alright.

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Blood pumping

So there were a couple of spelling errors throughout the story the interrupted the flow just a tad. With that said the action was well worth the read.

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Another 5 Star

What can I say? The story was worth the time reading. Didn't think that a story like this could get my eyes glued to it's pages but I was gladly wrong about that. I love the descriptions and lore of each character.

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Yes this is what I've been wanting

I would say this is a great book. The chapters are a bit long but who doesn't like those right. I love the main character and his trusted side kick. The author did this story right

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Okay

See I want to review. I do but I think my opinion is best somewhere else. Where the story is alright I think I'm going to let that stand. But as to why I think it's better if you just read it yourself and figure out why I would give it this rating. Because in my opinion, the plot wasn't as good as I thought it would be for various reasons such as, I'll give you just one. For the reason that the main character being a badass at sixteen and then going off having this hunky guy, it just doesn't work in my mind because this is technically a YA novel and so when you think of ya novels you think Percy Jackson Series, or maybe the John Clever Series, or here's and example of a ya erotica that I kind of liked. It's called Off-Campus and it's about a young adult (19) going to college and banging chicks. In my head, it is like, " Yeah, that makes sense, " but for action and erotica like this, it just doesn't click. I'm trying to imagine the main character but I see this older woman, not this 16-year-old. But I don't want to sound lame so there you go. But the story does great in the grammar situation. Like it's pristine and easy to read. The plot ain't that bad but I didn't like it. So it's hard to give it more stars because of my own biased opinion. either way, I hope the writer keeps writing more erotica pieces in the future.

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Help help help

So where the story is great I feel like it should be a bigger story. Something like what is the MC's job previously, what did he do to be thrown in this house with a doctor and people who watch and care for him, is he rich and how, just a lot of questions and a lot of ways this story could have been addressed but instead took this route. And not saying the story was bad, In on itself the story is about a man who is dealing with loss then makes up the loss with hallucinations but then as he gets better the hallucinations stop which causes him to close up to try to see them again. I didn't finish the story but I imagine it ends with him getting help. Either way if you like mystery and warm and sad stories then check this one out

Oh and before this is all done and said there are a few messed up sentences. But nothing too bad.

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Great

It looks like someone definitely took the time to write and promote their story. Good job I bet this novel has gotten thousands of reads already. But since this is the first review that I saw I just want to say that I was here first and that I had the most fun reading this story. Now I did see a few formatting and language problems but other than that eh the story was good enough.

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read up to chapter 20

So this review will be about the first twenty chapters that I've read. That's only a 1/4 of what is written but still, I think that I can say that the story is a slow-paced romance novel with the casual drama that you would see in one of those family sitcoms. But either way great story as it has few errors and is stimulating enough to keep on reading. I'm going to finish soon!!! Good job author.

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Great ideology.

I love the world that you have made here. The pantheon that you have made and the characters interacting with this world and rules make me want to write. Thank you for the great story.

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Okay

I don't know but this book just didn't hit it with me. Like I read to chapter 5 and just didn't feel like reading more. BUT with that said it's not a bad romance story. Like it has a lot of what I think a girl would be into reading. And a few guys out there could find the male protagonist relatable.

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Naughty granny

😂 hilarious 😂

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Tv show vamps

So I read up to chapter 10. Don't know if I wanna keep reading or put it down. But the main character is relatable and fun to read about. But I feel like the story is just a remix of vampire diaries with a nice twist of the just being no sun. The grammar is a little spotty but all together not a big deal. My favorite character is Sylvester. Don't know why but I just do. People who love vampires and female protagonist should read this book.

P.s Author I'm going to let it be your decision if I keep reading or not.

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Keep on writing

The story was amazing and every possible way that I could imagine there were a few grammatical errors but that is about it. I like the very fact that Davis and and I forget his name but either way I love that their perspective all collide into one. Now as for Catherine I thought okay first of all is this all just going to end up with it all being a dream because that's pretty lame ending for a book but no the offer delivers 100% through. I suggest that anyone who loves zombies horror thriller mystery will love this book Plus it kind of reminded me of the mist from Stephen King. Which is all the better. Author keep doing great work :-).

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Robot

So the story itself is great. Definitely worth five stars. But hear me out. The dialog was bland, the emotional manipulation wasn't there and just gave the entire story a massive downgrade for me. But with that said the story itself and the descriptions of scenery is perfect. Grammar perfect. So the story for the descriptions should be read for that reason.

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Great begining

Great beginning to a story that has not yet been finished. If you want to read a new story and have interaction with the author then I suggest you hop on this one. The author is very interactive and kind to their readers. I think I never had as much fun reading a story in my life then this one. So please take up the story and begin to journey of joy.

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Fantastic

I love the story and beyond. There are no complaints that I had about the story itself. Some commas missing but that isn't a big issue. Most authors just guess where to put those buggers anyways. Lol. But this story is all that one could look forward to reading. Today was a bright day outside and reading this story out in the middle of the woods was just a whole other experience. Truly a good book indeed.

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Coolyo

Great story indeed.

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Bitter sweet

Everyone was good till the end. Like it wasn't bad but it wasn't good either. Just didn't satisfy much. Either way though the road up towards the ending was amazing.

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Good job

Hey I know I came late to the party but the book is amazing. No errors and just every description puts a movie inside your head. Good job author.

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wish list

So I read the entire thing and left my comments where I did. And I think there are a few things I wish were different about the book. Like it's okay to do it in your own way. But I've read things like "I'm not a serial killer" by Brandon Sanderson and other things like infographics on youtube about serial killers, and just done a lot of research on the fantastic area of serial killings. And this book, this diary of a serial killer. It didn't feel at all like it was from that perspective. I got normal teen feelings. The plot I guess was this person discovering that they are not empathetic. But that's about it. The author doesn't space their paragraphs and some of the spelling and formatting were off. I didn't like that the whole vibe was confusing and complex to think about. Like, am I the narrator reading out of the diary, or are we witnessing the person who is not described writing in the diary. Who is reading it and why are they taking an interest in this diary. Who is reading it? Can any description of the town, people, the writer, anything be included? Like so in chapter 4 a story bomb was dropped that his own mom had been in a comma. Not chapter one. but chapter four. And the whole experience is just meh. I hate to sound like an asshole. I think that if the story was a little tweaked I would've enjoyed it more. I was heavily debating what to rank this story. Because off of first reading the story I would've given it a two or even a one-star rating. But reading it a second time I think I might have been too harsh. Because there is a plot and some thick writing going on. It wasn't just one chapter a no story. There is a story going on but it's hard to puzzle together. As the protagonist, the supposed serial killer to be is describing mordant events and things. Going into deep thoughts about their life and what the meaning of it is. And right now in chapter 9, you could say that they are about to murder someone. I don't know who. I don't know who would be the target. I have a guess but that is loose af. So I think that it is fair that a story with little to no editing, poorly formatted, and has a confusing writing style and plot, is worth three stars at most.

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Great story

Sorry, am tired. Read this till midnight and I think it's a binge-worthy book. Didn't leave a second to breathe let alone take my eyes off of the pages. Either way loved the story.

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3

Three chapters and everything was great. I gave the plot the rating it has because there just isn't a lot of plot to judge right now. I can kinda see the arc that the author is going for but it's just not too certain. Either way, check out the story I think it gets updated regularly and that means all sorts of interactions with the author. That's good.

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Scarry indeed.

I thought the story was interesting, to say the least. Because it was scary because of what happened that it was realistic in some ways. Like all stories but it just had a very underlying scary bit.

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Not expected

So you look at the cover and think, " Oh, this is going to be a cutesy story about the trifles of parenthood." But nope the summary already ruins that with three f-bombs like crazy. That honestly kind of made me laugh a bit. Because people always say don't judge a book by its cover. And I think that's absurd. Because that's precisely why we have covers on books. Lol. But this cover just ultimately tricked my mind. And when I read the story itself right now it's at one chapter but I honestly think I could have read more if presented. This is why I gave the rating a two. Because there wasn't a plot that I could judge really. But the cover made me think, and then the story being perfectly formatted and edited it looks like I would have to say where are the other chapters? Because I think I want more and if you read it you'll be on my side on this. The author is talented and the story itself is action-packed and I think just the right amount of fucked up and lovely.

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Great amongst fantasy

Clever and beautiful story.

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Didn't feel it

Now I wasn't into this book all that much. But by all means, that doesn't make it a terrible story. In fact, it's one of the better ones here on inkitt. But I think it was just that I was tired or something but the book didn't hook its talons into me. Now I think you should read this book because the characters are relatable, the story could be a good one on paper and you'll be enveloped in the author's fantastic world.

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Great story

Sorry, it's late at night and I just read this story and was entranced. So sorry if it's short but you should definitely check out this story.

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More chapters

You can't rate a plot without seeing it. But I love the characters and the way that the author inputs emotion into their dialog is just so realistic. And as far as grammar and things go It was perfect. I request more chapters because I want to more about what the story has to offer.

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Weird mix

So when I saw that this was a horror romance I thought owe it was just going to be another case of Stockholm syndrome but make it more fucked up. But,.. well it is sorta like like that but it was an interesting read that made me turn every page and even re-read it like it was a drug. Loved the story and I can't wait to read more of it. Thank you author for coming out with this story.

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good good good

So fantasy and romance. Not a lot of good ones written out there. For example, this is just my opinion but at least this book wasn't the twilight series. Didn't like those books but The Host on the other hand. Now that was a good sci-fi/romance. Either way, this book did its job and I kind of want to read it a second. Either way good read you should check it out. Chow.

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Nice

So I liked it. I don't I saw or noticed anything I didn't like. And with that said I will say that without a doubt that your book has made it to my top ten. Thank you for your patience and brilliant and creative mind.

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4-star

As an author, reader, reviewer, journalist, and many other titles that say I know what writing is all about. I will say that the story had me moved but the ending for me was unacceptable. Not because it doesn't make sense but because it didn't pack emotion for me. Everything was formatted just made it feel as if the author of this story just tried to make it look longer than it was. Not saying that's a problem that affects the story. But this type of "writing style" just doesn't feel right to me. With that said though I love the story

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hear me out

The emojis were misleading as hell. I mean when I see emojis used in the titles I was thinking, "This can't be series right? Because this just makes the chapter look silly." And I think that's still right. Now with that said the writing style is creepy sure but did it make me feel that something was going to crash down on me scary? Not so a scary short story that isn't that scary in my opinion. So plot and writing style takes a crash for me. But punctuation was perfect and the overall arcs of all of the stories were worth a read. And I think you should read them and tell me that I was wrong. Maybe I'm just desensitized from horror. Lol. But I hope the author continues writing. Sorry if this sounds toxic.

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laughed my ass off

So I liked the story. I think because it's a humor and a romance it compliments one another when those awkward moments happened. I was told to be quiet from how much I was just rolling on the floor gaining a six-pack. Lol.

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First review lol

Um just to make sure that the author doesn't feel discredited here I read this over maybe a week and a half. Damn sorry for that. The book was worth the time though in my opinion. Because out of all the books that had to review this week (11 of them) I think the one that was the most deserving of a five star review was this one. Because the grammar is amazing, didn't see a single thing wrong. If I looked closer, I might have, but I was just too invested in the world and its main characters. Now the side characters didn't really put in their little bit of the story but I'm one of those people that like the main characters and think that their sole purpose is to be in the spotlight of the book. So that bit doesn't matter. The writing style is elegant and easy to understand. Loved it to the beginning and end. I put it in my private reading lists to continue reading as the book updates. Can't wait to see more chapters.

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Great story

Sorry that it took me a bit to read this story. But I liked it. I thought it was just gonna be your generic female protagonist with a wolf counterpart. But nope I was proven wrong. I like it when I get proven wrong in stories. Doesn't make it predictable.

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Truly a scary thought

So I didn't see anything wrong with the story and I had a creepy sensation that someone was watching me and that my room was shrinking while reading the story. Wonderfully scary and I think the author did a good job of writing this story. Kudos.

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Kinky

So erotica is a very hard genre to review. Because personally I just don't know what to say. Like the sex scenes were good. But coming from a guy's perspective it just made it feel cringy a little. Because some of the lines were cheesy and I had my brother walk in and read over my shoulder. We both turned to each other and laughed our butts off. Not because the writing was poor but because it was cheesy for kinky erotica. So I and my brother talked about the book and we came up with many reasons for what the rating should be. I argued four stars because there were a couple of spelling mistakes and when I imagine erotica I want to feel sort of ashamed type feeling for reading it. But it just made me laugh and want to keep reading to keep laughing. But my brother liked the story and agreed with me on the grammar and the plot. But said the writing style and that the overall rating should be five. So this will be my last note on the book itself. It's a definite four to five-star book for anyone to read.

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Success

I can see this book going places. But with that said I, in my opinion, didn't find myself hooked on the book. But since this was a review swap I had to keep my side of the deal and I don't regret it. And I did in fact read the book. And here's what I liked. The descriptions of the places are amazing. I can nearly picture them inside my head and being there. It was so good. Okay, but the dialog and the title were that got me. Because I'm a very opinionated person right. And when I saw the title "Never Kiss Your Boyfriend" I was thinking like, why not? Aint that your boyfriend? it just presented me with a pov that was weird to me that made me think of the title more than the actual book. It might just be my brain so,.. I don't hold that against the author. But the dialog just felt a little more robotic than human. And that's my only complaint really. Sorry for the long rant. I truly enjoyed the bits and pieces that I read and enjoyed.

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Four star success

Now I don't say this with malice or anything. I liked the story but it was less than ideal for me. So the grammar is not perfect but again it's noticeable and it gets hard to read during some sections. With that said that kind of brought it all down one star.

Okay, negativity is out of the way. now. I loved your main character. I can't wait to read the second book when it comes around. Or maybe it's already released and you shout post it on my wall. But either way great story I could read it again.

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Loved it

I liked the characters and the world-building. It's very well crafted and would recommend it to others.

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😎👍📝

The story was amazing. Well one of the two stories I liked. The sessions story was just epic to read. I would 100% recommend it to others

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♥ ♥ ❤

Loved it. Simple as that. The story was intense and it made me was to keep reading it. Even though it is my least liked genre I would say that I've read other romance stories and say that out of most of them I would read this one more.

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Awesome

Now, this is a book that a guy can get pumped to read. I loved it from the front to the back. I can't wait for more chapters. Please keep writing your obviously good at it so I can't wait to read more. I've added it to my list to continue. Just promise to keep writing!!!

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Moving

The story was moving to say the least. But the character engages with the readers in a way that it doesn't feel like an over-done romance novel. Like it feels like I'm reading a story about what real romance looks like. I give kudos to the author for not doing over-corny romance. Because otherwise, I couldn't have gotten through the thing. But I loved the story and I hope it continues.

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What have you done to get this 5 star review?

I loved it and I want more chapters to read. It was just an amazing world and characters that I could relate to and put myself in. Both scary and thrilling the story deserves more than the usual 4-star reviews that it has been getting.

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Red Moon Rising.

I liked the book as far as it has been written. Mistakes that I could ignore so the grammar wasn't a problem. The story is original and creative. I loved reading the story and I can't wait to read more. every chapter keeps you wanting to read more. Some of the best cliffhangers that I have seen.

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Good

The story is really good.

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Loved the story

It was creative, exciting, motivational, and just all-around a great read. I recommend this to any reader wanting to sit down and dedicate their time to reading this great novel.

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The Villain

So when it comes to bundles of short stories I pick and select the stories that I want to read. So I read the Abomination and Villain. Out of those two, I thought The villain was one of the better ones. Now the dialog is a little messed up I couldn't understand who was talking and just had to guess that it was a crowd of people or some sort. But liked the two stories I read and I'm sure that there are more that people here on this app will love. I recommend this to someone who truly wants to sit down for a couple minutes and read.

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Wow

Imagine ww2 but,.. nevermind it's just as sad as that. Reading this book was great. Would 100% Recommend.

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Great story. Needs a tad of editing.

The writing feels so professional! I feel like, with chapter two, I couldn't get into the story as much, but with chapter three, I feel like I'm more engaged with Yuna's thought process. This kinda was the reason why I dropped a star on writing style. But again I do love that every word that was used in the novel just meant something. Like in high school when the teacher would be like "Why do you think the author used the word The in the sentence here on line 8 and paragraph seven?" I'm putting this in a joking sense but seriously it's like every sentence just hits home.

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👍

The plot of the story is very engaging. I couldn't stop reading once I began. I loved all the chapters so far. Looking forward to the next chapter. A great book with great potential! I think this author is going places.

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Um Okay

Like I don't want to be an asshole in this situation. Because I think the story is just fine but I just don't like the plot. The plot just wasn't the one that agreed with me as a reader. Teleporting through time while paragliding isn't something that I would want to read. But because I had to read this story I think that it's an eye-opener for sure. Because the story wasn't that bad, I bet to the right person this story is a five star. But for me, I think the story just didn't line up that well in the first two chapters. I think there was a flow that interrupted and I just didn't catch the thread. Or something. But I think that as a writer I know that it's only my taste that is going to bring down these stars so I'm sorry for that. But as a reader I think that the story doesn't make sense and if you go off of "It's a fictional book so it doesn't always have to make sense" Then grand this book is for you and I believe that you are right.

To the author. I will change or delete this review if you want. I do think that the time that you poured into this book was worth it. I overall can't wait to see more chapters because I do think that if the journey through your book is good then it doesn't matter if it makes sense or not. Please keep up the work you're a talented individual.

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The Thief With A Silver Tongue and Pretty But Punchable Face

Delightful story. A pretty thief that faces challenges and is forced to decide whether to take on a dangerous job with dangerous people or just chill and relax. But Nah fuck that he's going to do the job of course. I love the character. The dialogue and the humor are also great. Can't wait to see what happens next. Great job author.

I think that anyone who loves thieves' stories or stories with thieves in them than check out this story.

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100%

I liked and read it as far as the book would allow me to. Like I loved every bit and detail. The Hidden Moon is a great read and an amazing time waster. Loved it.

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Not Perfect But Close

I think we can both agree that stories can never be perfect. But this story gets close to perfection. I loved the characters, plot, and the character arcs between all of the characters. The Man In Her Eyes is an exceptional novel that I think anyone should read. And a plus towards the author I was listening to NF while reading so just picturing your picture and then reading your book kinda made me laugh. But with that said I think you are an amazing writer. And this book is awesome.

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The Dream

Loved the book front to back. I can't wait for it to be updated and more chapters to appear. The book reminds me a lot of my favorite author's styles of writing so that was a bonus. Now the plot was great I think anyone should read it solely for the plot of the book. To the author, you made one of the best fantasies on here. I hope you publish this on a bigger site or company because I can see this going far.

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Wolf!!!

So my first thought was like "So his name is actually wolf?" Okay, that's fine let's dive in. So the character wolf is both primitive and witty. Which makes sense. I think that character is great and that one should read this story alone for this character. Puts a new perspective against every other main character nowadays.

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Like it.

The man saved us the plot of the battle of lovers and the whole I can't marry a commoner trope. Love it just because of that. Didn't have to waste time and just went into the juicy meat of it all. Good job!!!

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Sins

So I like the premise of the story. The seven deadly sins but better. Instead of literal personifaction their just spirits that one guy can control. And the ironic thing is that anger was the most accepting of all of the sins. Loved the story and am going to continue to read it.

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G()()D Chapter

Didn't see anything wrong with the writing of the story. I thought the plot was good and the characters are well written. The author has talent and I can see this story going places. Good job!!!

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👍 Great job

So I liked it for the most part. See I'm not that mean of a person so I'll keep this bit of constructive criticism short. Show more than tell it. I think that was really the only problem. With the story. The plot and the character arcs are a little wacky but I think that's just me. I saw one comment about it but again I don't think that's necessarily wrong. Um, but in truth, I don't think the book is worth three or four stars. Especially since it's at the beginning of its creation. If you want a book to read in your spare time then you should pick this one up. I don't think it'll kill you to spare a couple of minutes and see if I'm full of shit or not. This is one of the better books on inkitt.

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Emoji spam here

Either way, you look at this story I would say without a doubt that I liked reading it. Now the beginning just goes full throttle and reveals the plot but that doesn't matter. Because the bulk of the story so far hasn't been written. So it's not really fair for me to say this. The book Eye Contact is amazing and I would recommend it to others.

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Heart Without A Soul

I liked it. But there were just a couple of problems. The writing style was a little different than what I'm used to reading. I'm debating myself through this entire review on how to rate the writing style.e. Because see I didn't enjoy that bit so it's either a three or a four but I don't know if that's fair to say. The plot though is absolutely mind-blasting and enjoyable. See there are other stories that kind of do this but I feel like this author just perfected it. I can't wait for more chapters to be released.

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Good Book

Sorry for taking so long to review this book. But it was worth every second of it when I finally got to it. I will recommend this to everyone on my Twitter account.

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Keep going!

So the story is still in the making so it is little for me to review. But from what I saw I can say that it is something that I would pick up from a shelf of a library and read it right then and there.

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Great story

So I read it and there was an amazing story waiting for me. The author is moving it to another site so I"m lucky I was one of the few that got to read it. The story holds characters that are crazy, loving, and selfish. All of the tropes one would want to read.

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Thumbs up

I liked everything from the wording to the plot. The character arc is not done yet but I can't wait for more chapters to be uploaded. Keep it up author

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It's amazing!!!

So I'm not one into romance. I think it's corny and kind of predictable for the most bit. But this story is amazing. The plot feels original and the romance and erotic bits that are in it are overdone. I think this is an amazing story that all those who are over 18 should read.

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Poem to story

I liked it. But I think that what's going to happen with this story is that most people come to inkitt to read stories and seeing a book that is a story but formatted as a poem is a little off-putting. But with that said I enjoyed it. So to readers, I think you should totally read this story.

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Great story 😎

I liked it. What more do you need to read a story? This one is just as good as any other.

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The Story Is Good!!!

So I'm not a grammar shark by any means. Like, look at my 60+ reviews. None of them were about spelling, punctuation, or grammar. And so I say this book needs editing because the capitalization is ass. Plus the enter bar was not pressed enough to give the story space to breathe. Okay, that's enough ragging on that. Because the story was amazing. The four-star review I believe is fair because I truly loved the characters and the romance and truly I think that if I was going to read a romance I would want to read one written this way by this author. Like for only 6 chapters so far in the story I like your idea of just blasting through it edit later types of vibes. Because I'm a fair bit of the same but I run my rough drafts through Grammarly and a quick skim of proofreading. Anyhow for the chapter so far I want to see more. I think there still is a lot of potential in the story.

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it's great

it's great. Like I didn't go into it thinking that it was poetry so I thought it was messed up and that the author didn't know what she was doing. But reading the other reviews I went through it a second time and it was a more pleasant thing to read. But I don't know. It's just not for me I guess. Still, I'm not going to give this person a bad review because of my tastes. It was a good book overall and there were very few to no mistakes that I could spot. Good job author and kudos when it gets published or whatever your goal is with this book. Sorry if this sounds rude.

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Thumbs up on the writing portion

I have not come across such polished writing skills on this app, Really appreciate the way the author wrote his characters, background, and even the plot was awesome and easy to follow. I also think that the two main characters in the story description could have been more described but the emotion and character were great.

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Total Badass

The story was badass with little to no mistakes. I thought the idea was original and deserves more credit than what it has. Please leave a review if you check it out. You won't regret it.

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Long and worth it

So I began reading this in April and I was lucky enough to have the best weather to read a book (Gray and raining) so I just sat on my couch and read through this like it was candy. Just one chapter after another it was taken in. The author is amazing at third person pov plus the book was a mixture of comedy and a few pieces here and there that made me stand up pumped as if I was going to fight a dragon. It was really a good story through and through,

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Oh My God

So good of a story to read. Just absolutely FABULOUS!!!

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Fantastic!!!

So the plot was great don't get me wrong. I think it's one of the better bible/fantasy/horror/Sci-Fi that I've read. And for any out there that are wanting to read this, I suggest you should, especially if you like stories related to the bible or the ideology of the devil in stories. Either way, this was a fantastic read and I hope it continues.

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A cliché done perfectly.

I've read so many books similar to hers on inkitt so it was predictable and kind of a slow read with the novel being still in the making and somewhat short. This is around its 8th chapter at the time of this review. But the writing style gets you immersed and has little to no spelling errors. That's great. The reason for the two-star in the plot is not because it sucked or anything. It just didn't feel original and you could get the same feeling reading any other romance. And it just doesn't seem fair to lower the overall story because of a somewhat unoriginal plotline. Now would I read again? Sure. The book was a good book for romance. Had all the cheesy tropes and the erotica bit was fun to read sure. Not saying the book itself sucked. That's not my point at all. I think the plot was just unoriginal and predictable. Well structured and the plot didn't leave any questions. Like many other romances. So yeah three on plot and four overall.

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Nothing Bad About This Book

Ethan is a character that is highly relatable that gets pushed into moral dilemma after moral dilemma. It's nice to read because one like me who doesn't read a lot of dystopian novels, I've read Red Rising, Fahrenheit 451, Hunger Games, and a few others and I would have to say that I put this book at least top three among them. It's creative, immersive, and just epic to read. Enough said about it really. You should be reading instead of this review. Like, come on. Lol.

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Love it to the stars and back

"i'll do anthing in my power to make the war games in three days or less." I don't agree with this. And trust me I've written plenty of tournament arcs and I think going down this kind of route is just not realistic or acceptable to most readers. If anything since training is involved and we're talking about immortal beings that half a year minimum and even that is cutting it a little short. Plus Altair is learning everything so soon and the story feels like your trying to push it towards its ending. But you could totally flesh this out and make it have a more emotional connection with all of your characters. I fill like there's a chunk missing in this story and you have all the keys to make it perfect. Like I demand more chapters because it's a good story but like all good stories it takes time. And for such a grand and vast idea like this one you could most definitely flesh it out. For instance Altair's familiarity with the ax, Proxima's world, and her relationships with these other gods, Even throw in some twists on why some of the gods truly want the humans to die, and maybe go into detail about why only humans are getting deleted and not other beings like dwarfs. Oh and plus by giving Altair and Proxima time to train and go on this miny adventure you can show your readers what value Altair's home and family have to compare with one another. This was going to be a comment but I'm going to use it as a review. So that this book can have the five-star review it deserves. I hope the author of such an amazing story is willing to talk to me about it.

But now for you readers. This story is amazing. The writing style is different then any other story you'll read. Because it's like reading a screenplay. But that only enhances the cinematic feeling of the book as you get immersed in it. The characters are amazing and creative. Altair is a relatable character with some mystery behind him. I loved it, to say the least, and you should totally check it out and help me demand for more chapters to be released.

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Oh my god/devil

Like it from the beginning to the end. Can't say more about it than that. The characters are awesome, the dialogue is great, and the formatting is just awesome. You should definitely read this book.

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Loved it 😎

I don't know what to say. I've written over 50 reviews about nearly every genre here on inkitt. But always am surprised to find a book that tops another one. Like this book it's amazing and thrill riding. I could read it over and over again and not be tired of it.

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Great Story

I loved it and you should read and review this story too!!!

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Scary Indeed

I would be the one to say scarier than any Stephen King novel out there. Like coming from a household where Cujo and the Dark Tower series were worshiped more than any of my own successes I can say without a doubt that I would read this 9/10 times. Little errors there and there but I'm sure that you a normal reader won't spot them so I won't point them out. The plot is really good and was easy to follow. Plus the descriptions themselves should be read. In other words, I recommend this without another thought.

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Funny

Note to author: I'll change this or delete it if you want, seeing as I know you'll see this first before anyone else.

The story for it being chapter-long I can't really comment on. Like it was funny but I would like to read more to get into the meat of it. Because I'm one of those people that strongly believe that it takes five chapters of a book to actually be hooked into it. So does this book intrigues me? The answer is no. Plus it's still looking to be in the editing phase which is not a problem. I think one could easily read this and ignore the not-so-subtle mistakes and still find the humor within it.

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Rad as hell

I read this multiple times and still doesn't get old. The plot was perfect, the writing style was immersive, and there were little to no mistakes in spelling or grammar. It was a perfect story and I think that anyone can get into it. So if you are a reader and you just want to sit on your couch for a couple of hours then I suggest highly that you read this book.

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Cool Story 😎

It was a good story that kept me jumping out of my seat. I know I said that saying wrong but the story is really good in my opinion.

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Eleven chapters and a few unnecessary things

So the eleven chapters that I read I can say that it was an amazing fantasy book. It has action and a great plot. But my problem is the first three chapters. I'm talking about the Character Descriptions, The Table of Contents, and the Disclaimer. One you don't need the Table of Contents. When your reading there's a tab where the reader can see all the chapters and their titles. So it was unnecessary. Character descriptions are also unnecessary because they should just be woven into the story not put on the side. And disclaimer. So many authors are worried about other people stealing their work. But no one shouldn't worry about this.
Okay, the rant is done with. But now onto the story. It was amazing without a doubt I would see this on the shelf of a library and check it out and read it a couple of times.

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Holy grail good

I liked the action and the emotion that is very well played in the story. If you like wolves and loves stories and arena gladiator fights or illegal dog fighting rings (https:petmydogorelse.com) then this is the book for you. And to the author, I hope you continue writing the story. I would hate to see a book disappear in history because of a lack of confidence and not a lack of skill.

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Fast paced but good

The book emmidtaly hooked me into the world or the "white room" and then kept me there. It was both creepy and satisfying to read. Like the character is trapped and it gives off the vibes that he's being constantly watched. It was a fun read and I say that without a doubt I can't wait to read more of it when it comes out.

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Wasn't my cup of tea

The story wasn't what I would typically read and so I was bored the entire time reading the story. But with that said I do believe that everyone else the adores the genre would love it. So 100% read it if you like the genre.

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Murder On My Mind

So I like this book because the entire time I was thinking "Just kill the teacher". Pause. Like the kids are suffering and getting killed by these evil teachers. Either way that's not the biggest part of the book. See these two main characters are trying to escape and are frightened out of their minds and I can't blame them. But with that said I was like, "Stab their knees or something!" The entire time. I was entertained and I'm sure that if you read this review you will be entertained as well.

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Great Dynamic Duo

For the story itself, I like what is going on but since this is the first erotica that I've ever read I have to say that it's not what I thought erotica would be. Like I thought fifty shades of gray dirty where the whole story was about sex. But this one has a plot to it and I find it interesting and pulled me in.

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Trigger warning please

I will be honest. I was pissed off reading the book. Because of the main characters and how they act. The author is a genius in how she manipulates scenes to make the most effective of emotional damage. The story in general is depressing and overall just heart tearing, tear-jerking, a lip-biting bit of a book. I can't give it lower stars because the writing style is amazing it made me feel emotions and into the story. The plot isn't like your normal thriller and makes you want to continue reading. There weren't any grammar or spelling mistakes that I've seen. And so the overall story is a five star and up. But the reason why I'm pissed off with the story is that Sarah is so greedy and emotionally selfish while Ayaan is ignorant and just as emotionally selfish. Either way, great story would recommend to others for sure.

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Great Read

If I could describe this book as one thing it would be a great horror movie. Because the author's descriptions are like watching a film. Fluid and colorful. But it's scary and gives you goosebumps. Clever and well written.

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Lax AF for a horror

So when I was reading I thought since the genre was horror there was going to be a slow beginning that grows into creepy to gory horror. But instead, I just feel meh through the entire thing. Especially at the end where you're making the mc just run. Like, focusing on the breath or the fact of why she's running. Go into deep details of the character's physical descriptions. But everything else about your book is alright. The plot is not good but like writing style is great and grammar and all that are pretty good with like a couple of mistakes. With that said to keep writing you are obviously a very smart person so I bet if you just work on this book a bit more it'll be the scariest novel here on inkitt.

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Thumbs up

So I'm not the one that likes these types of stories. I was bored and just felt like wow and really that's happening throughout the thing. Like the marriage bit. That was strange to have it so early in the story I thought that it was going to happen a little later down the line as most stories do it. But this really only means that the author is original in ideas. And personally, I don't think I could properly leave anything but a five-star review. See if this was a fantasy or action I could say something about it. But because this genre is a little out of my element all I could say was that the story had little to no spelling mistakes and it was fluid for the most part.

Oh, and to the author, I appreciate the story and how interactive you are with your readers. Thank you for letting me read this.

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Great

So reading the story there were ups and downs. For instance, I liked it. But there is a thing called too much drama. Now don't get me wrong I write stories here too and I know that having drama to a story especially a whole string of drama can captivate and hook the reader to continue reading. Now this story does that. It keeps you wanting to read more and find the bottom of this whole cobweb of drama. But with that said I felt it was a tad bit of a hair too much. Either way, I give this story ten out of ten. Like no mistakes in grammar and spelling that I saw from a first glance. The plot was nicely paced and the author's writing style was easy to understand and full of emotion. I loved it.

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A play inside your head

So as I get to the end of your story here I just wanted to say a couple of things. One the story is lovely. The idea that this is all a play is another unique thing for me to read. It's put me the reader in a whole other perspective. Like I'm a person in the theater watching a play. I loved that. But the spacing of the chapters. Like the actual spacing, not the pace. Needs to be improved. But otherwise, it was a very interesting read.

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Anger

The anger that is portrayed by the main character was sad with a dash of oh shit anger. The best emotion portrayed so far was chapter one. The second chapter could have used more detail but either way still a good read and a good couple of chapters.

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Damn!!!

I read many stories before. And I can say that this had made my top twenty in books that I like to read. I want more already. Keep up the good work author and for you the reader please check this story out you won't regret it.

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Intense as F#*k

One moment the book can be calm and sad to intense to crippling depression. The last chapter (which was chapter 7 when I read this story) was just filled with sadness and intensity. I was genuinely worried about the main characters while I was reading this story. The author has a way of making you feel what the characters or feeling and allowing you to peek into their world. It was an amazing read.

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Longer and better

I can't wait for you to post more chapters. This is a well-thought-out plot of a story. It was interesting and always kept me guessing. This is so good considering that books nowadays always seem to be the same stuff about the same things. This was a nice twist of originality.

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So good for just a sample

Since the story was a sample I'm glad I got a free glimpse of this story. And from what I read here I would recommend that you the reader should go and buy the full thing on Kindell and on any and every single other platform that this book is on. It deserves that much at least.
And for the writer, you're a genius. I'm a beginning author that just published his first story and I can see that this book will be worth every penny.

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Adorable

The character Mary is funny, smart, and just cute when it comes to love interests in the story. I read up to chapter 20 and could say without a doubt that I am going to continue reading it. It's a comfortable read that doesn't lunge out at you and pull you in. It's more of a relaxing chill in the sun type of book. Not too dramatic nor too lovey dovey. The book was just perfect for me to read and would 100% recommend it to others.

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Next Stephen King

This book is creepy and for horror, it's doing its job. As more chapters update the more this story will unfold. It's interesting, to say the least. And to say the most would be to say that the author's writing style is out of this world. It's creative and hooking.

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A year of just typing and uploading

So I know that it looks petty to write a review for your own book. Because let me be honest, I'm more biased than most people. Especially when it comes to this mess of a book. Well, I think that it's funny and impressive. See I'm a published author that has sold over a thousand books with little to no effort. And I'm here on inkitt just to write for fun. So "The Useless Villain" came to me in a dream and I thought "do you know what would be fun?" Let's upload three chapters every Sunday for a year and see how things go. I'm not going to edit past google editing until the story is done. I know that sounds terrible. And well it is. See because the story is going from mind to screen, so no planning and editing is involved in the process. Still, I like to think that even without that stuff I'm having fun writing the story and that you the reader are having a good time too, If not then damn. You can read it in a year when I get a professional editor to look over the entire thing. Either way, I appreciate the feedback, the constructive criticism, or just the downright insults. Because it shows me as a writer where I need to improve. Thank you all ❤ I hope you all love the story as much as I loved writing it.
And if you have any questions don't be afraid to ask them in the comments. ☺

But to those who really want an action-packed comedy mixed with romance, villains, twists, and an amazing character arc, Then don't be afraid, Come and read this story.

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I like it but it's short

See I would love to give a lot of praise for the novel. But seeing as it's only one chapter I can't go off on anything that stood out. Like it began we were introduced to two characters that seem to be just regular teenagers. Then the author changed it and even though it was better indeed. Put more witches involved but still, the concrete fact is that it's only the beginning. And I like it and I want to see it grow. And as for other people the person reading this. I think you should read it and then watch it grow.

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Bad Ass Book

It reminded me a lot of The Wheel of Time in the way that the combat goes and the descriptions. The world is vibrant and beautiful. And with the characters being well badass and just so cool and haveing interesting dialogue between all of the characters made this an easy book to blast through.

And to the author. Thank you for the read. It was a fantastic time!

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Really good!!!

Oh, it was a good horror story. The info-dumping and the depressing character is a downside a little bit. But overall I think if you want a story to read in the dark to give you chills check out this story! But overall there were no spelling or grammar errors that I could see so that's perfect. Then the plot of the story is yet to reveal itself. Like I don't know what the end goal is and I don't know if the whole plot is just Emily surviving a hell hole of a hospital or something greater yet. Either way, it would be a great investment to check out this story!

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Cool

The beginning was everything that you could want except for action. Like no action in the entire story. And I was expecting at least a little action from the father. But I'll be honest. Um, I was very bored reading everything after chapter 12. I thought since he was going somewhere where super humans would be that powers and stuff would be more apparent. But that wasn't the case and it was the downfall for me. It was hard getting into a book where no action existed. I loved the first 12 chapters with a passion. And if you like a slice of life mixed with fantasy aspects the go-ahead this story is for you. But for me, I didn't like a few things. The spelling and grammar were off. Just a tad nothing to get your panties in a wad. So that wasn't a big part of it. What I didn't like was that the main character was bland and expressionless. And that kinda killed it for me. And the plot for the first twenty chapters should have been cut off and began at chapter 14 or should have kept going with the slice of life aspect at home with his family. I give this a four-star because personally I didn't like it but there is no real reason just to give it fewer stars. So to the writer, your book is worth five to the right person. I'm just not that person. I hope you continue writing. It was a fun experience reading your book.!

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YA book that is dark and badass

This story reminded me a lot of my writing. It was informational and provided good dialogue. There were the tinyest of spelling and punctuation errors. But that shouldn't discredit a book. The story was intriguing and the character is highly relatable. I read it and commented through the entire thing. And it was interesting and at times a bit confusing. But I will keep reading it as more chapters come out. Because seeing this story progress will be worth it. So YOU should pick it up and begin reading it yourself. It's fantastic read for those who are looking for dark fantasy.

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Real and relatable

The most realistic character that you could imagine. It was funny, sad, and tragic all mixed into a character. I loved it and couldn't stop reading it once I had it up on my phone. Just a couple swipes and I was done with it. Now I can't wait but to read more.

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Demonic Douglas

This one was great with very few mistakes so far. Can't wait to type more of it

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The gourmet gladiator

I think that is a good book and from a author's perspective I think that I am gradually loving to write it. And I think others will love to read it just as much.

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The immortal prisoner

I liked it. Yes I am the author and yes I am bias. But it was fun to write and I think that others can enjoy the short-story

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Good story

There good story for what I read. Don't know what to say. It's one chapter

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Hm? Alright

So when I saw the title Ms.Gatsby I thought it was going to be a gender bender on The Great Gatsby. But it wasn't and that was slightly disappointing tbh. But with that said nothing was wrong with the story when it comes to grammar. The first chapter of the story didn't really hook me into wanting to read more chapters. But since there is only one chapter so far I would be willing to read more just to see if my expectations are beaten. Either way good job author.

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