Thriller

Sabrina Ettey

Hello Everyone,

I came back again with a new update of my Thriller/Mystery story The S Girl (chapter 34 - work in progress). It would be really nice if you guys review it and let me know your feelings toward the story. As always every kind of review including constructive criticism is appreciable as it helps me to improve writing and encourage me very much. So, if you would kindly take your time to read the story and let me know about your through the review, it'd be really great and ... See More helpful.

Also, you'd notice I kind of remastered my cover to give it a more professional look. Check it out and tell how do you like it in the comments!

For the new readers, here's the blurb of the story:

How far can one go in search of truth? Well, when it comes to her, she knows no bounds. She is a mystery, mystery is her passion, and danger is her profession.

Her name is Saravi Hussain. She, known as just a young architect to the world is a woman full of mystery. The simpler she's on the outside, the more complex on the inside. The real her is the notorious and fierce spy who can go to any extent to discover the root of the crime. When she gets the job to find a thriving serial killer, who mercilessly kills young women, little she knows that this one journey will take her to the deep, dark world of crime and conspiracy. The question is, is she ready enough to test her limits? How long will she be able to hold those strong boulders? Will she be able to rip off the mask of the culprit or she'd have to be the victim like others?

Mysteries, murders, conspiracies, love, death, betrayal will be surrounded throughout the whole journey of The S Girl.

The S Girl: https://www.inkitt.com/stories/mystery/74879/chapters/1

M.S GASTON

Hi. Im new here as a writer but as a reader im quite here for a long time. So, i decided to voice out my thoughts and turn them into reality. I would lovely have your reviews and comments.

https://www.inkitt.com/stories/mystery/225216?ink_source=undefined.undefined&ink_block=stories&ink_page_number=&ink_metric=&ink_user=alexandriavictoria

Sabrina Ettey

Hello Everyone,

Today I came back with a new recent update of my current work in progress Thriller/Mystery story The S Girl (chapter 33). It would be really nice if you guys review it and let me know your feelings toward the story. As always every kind of review including constructive criticism is appreciable as it helps me to improve writing and encourage me very much. So, if you would kindly take your time to read the story and let me know about your through the review, it'd be ... See More really great and helpful.

For the new readers, here's the blurb of the story:

How far can one go in search of truth? Well, when it comes to her, she knows no bounds. She is a mystery, mystery is her passion, and danger is her profession.

Her name is Saravi Hussain. She, known as just a young architect to the world is a woman full of mystery. The simpler she's on the outside, the more complex on the inside. The real her is the notorious and fierce spy who can go to any extent to discover the root of the crime. When she gets the job to find a thriving serial killer, who mercilessly kills young women, little she knows that this one journey will take her to the deep, dark world of crime and conspiracy. The question is, is she ready enough to test her limits? How long will she be able to hold those strong boulders? Will she be able to rip off the mask of the culprit or she'd have to be the victim like others?

Mysteries, murders, conspiracies, love, death, betrayal will be surrounded throughout the whole journey of The S Girl.

The S Girl: https://www.inkitt.com/stories/mystery/74879/

Avalon Greene

Hello!
I'm Avalon Greene and I'm looking for reviews for my paranormal thriller, "The Princess Entourage":

What happens when music comes face to face with sorcery?
It is the early 21st Century and young Bethy Rodgers, music-lover, cares nothing about her royal ancestry and would love to live in her own little bubble of song and tunes. In fact, this works out for a while...
Until one day, she has to choose between living in a world as a slave and leaving it to be ... See More destroyed...

https://www.inkitt.com/stories/thriller/213736

It's the very first draft and completed. I'd appreciate any constructive reviews on it. I'm also willing to swap reviews, so you can go ahead and slide your drafts across. I won't promise that I will get them done quickly. I will take time, but I will define read and give enough of a review to help you along.
Thank you! Have a great day!

Jerlynn

I updated a story called Terror's Agony if you're interested in giving it a try, reviews are much appreciated as well. https://www.inkitt.com/stories/217036?preview=true
Excerpt:
That's the only difference between you and me. I don't deny fear as my ruler, I don't deny that free will is only an unreachable illusion, a lifeless dream.
Save some trouble and don't kid yourself, because the only thing you're going to learn from me is that letting go has always taken up the whole ... See More measly list of choices you have in your lifetime, and it's not even yours.
I'm not going to trick you into thinking you have choices, so don't confuse me with your made-up conscience, because I'm real, and I'm angry.

chilledcat

Hey! I'm a 21 year old writer from England, I've been writing on and off for a few years, just as a fun hobby but lately I've been wanting to take it to the next stage as I've become more comfortable in sharing my work. There's still some rough edges in my work I wont lie, but I would really appreciate it if people could go and check out my short stories. Feedback will be greatly appreciated especially as I'm working on a bigger story!

>> https://www.inkitt.com/stories/scifi/38610

Avalon Greene

Hello!
I'm Avalon Greene and I'm looking for reviews for my paranormal thriller, "The Princess Entourage":

What happens when music comes face to face with sorcery?
It is the early 21st Century and young Bethy Rodgers, music-lover, cares nothing about her royal ancestry and would love to live in her own little bubble of song and tunes. In fact, this works out for a while...
Until one day, she has to choose between living in a world as a slave and leaving it to be ... See More destroyed...

https://www.inkitt.com/stories/thriller/213736

It's the very first draft and completed. I'd appreciate any constructive reviews on it. I'm also willing to swap reviews. I won't promise that I will get them done quickly. I will take time, but I will define read and give enough of a review to help you along.
Thank you and have a great day!

blanq

Another chapter of the epic tale is out. Please Read and review it. thank you. https://www.inkitt.com/stories/213023?preview=true

Avalon Greene

Hello!
I'm Avalon Greene and I'm looking for reviews for my paranormal thriller, "The Princess Entourage":

What happens when music comes face to face with sorcery?
It is the early 21st Century and young Bethy Rodgers, music-lover, cares nothing about her royal ancestry and would love to live in her own little bubble of song and tunes. In fact, this works out for a while...
Until one day, she has to choose between living in a world as a slave and leaving it to be ... See More destroyed...

https://www.inkitt.com/stories/thriller/213736
It's the very first draft and ongoing, but I'd appreciate any constructive reviews on it. I'm also willing to swap reviews. I won't promise that I will get them done quickly. I will take time, but I will define read and give enough of a review to help you along.
Thank you! Have a great day!

Sabrina Ettey

Hello Everyone,

Today I came back with a new recent update of my Thriller/Mystery story The S Girl (chapter 32 - work in progress). It would be really nice if you guys review it and let me know your feelings toward the story. As always every kind of review including constructive criticism is appreciable as it helps me to improve writing and encourage me very much. So, if you would kindly take your time to read the story and let me know about your through the review, it'd be really ... See More great and helpful.

For the new readers, here's the blurb of the story:

How far can one go in search of truth? Well, when it comes to her, she knows no bounds. She is a mystery, mystery is her passion, and danger is her profession.

Her name is Saravi Hussain. She, known as just a young architect to the world is a woman full of mystery. The simpler she's on the outside, the more complex on the inside. The real her is the notorious and fierce spy who can go to any extent to discover the root of the crime. When she gets the job to find a thriving serial killer, who mercilessly kills young women, little she knows that this one journey will take her to the deep, dark world of crime and conspiracy. The question is, is she ready enough to test her limits? How long will she be able to hold those strong boulders? Will she be able to rip off the mask of the culprit or she'd have to be the victim like others?

Mysteries, murders, conspiracies, love, death, betrayal will be surrounded throughout the whole journey of The S Girl.

The S Girl: https://www.inkitt.com/stories/mystery/74879/chapters/1