Story is Balinese Puppet Shadows.
I seek brutal review because this is who I learn.
Tale is of Catholic Asian girl in Silicon Valley who turns from devote and faithful wife to wanton adulteress over her life time and her looking back in old age.
While not intended to be X rated there are parts that fit an X rating.
Story is also filled with photos.
Yo peoples! I'm looking for some super extra awesome beta readers, AND, If you are one of the first three to offer to Beta read I will swap stories with you, and be your beta reader/writing buddy! Yes, yes, I know, I'm amazing. *Starts tearing up* But I couldn't do anything without you guys who make this all possible! Now I know what you're thinking: "But, what's the story about?" You may be asking, Well, I'm gonna tell ya, hold on to your horses. Geez.
Okay, so it's a fantasy story ... See More set in a slightly advanced world in terms of technology. there's this kid, Angelo who's going to an event with his parents. The event only happens once every summer, so he's really excited. But not everything is as it seems, and just as the festival ends he gets into trouble with a man who isn't who he says he is, and Angelo needs to escape this mysterious man with his three new friends, and eventually stop this man from awakening one of the most powerful ancient beings trapped in a statue. One of the Siribi named Anansi.
There, ya happy? Now tell me if you're interested in the comments below!
Greetings and Salutations! My name is Kenn Phillips. My first novel on Inkitt is called The Raven and the Paladin, Part One - LOST.
If a stranger came up to you and told you that you were immortal, would you believe him? Of course, you wouldn't. However, if that stranger had saved your life and, after being in a coma for three days, you start to see faeries, gnomes and other mythical creatures... Perhaps, then, you would believe him.
"Daggers. Daggers. All around me sixways ... See More are daggers. And each one presents a different death. Love and martyrdom. Sublime and indifference. Chaos and nostalgia. Of them all, let me die at the hands, and at the feet, of love." – Wiz, Journal Entry #194
Have you ever believed that there was a dark, evil force out to get you? Neither did Stew Kasey. That’s for paranoid conspiracy theorists. The bad thing is, he should believe it, because there’s definitely a dark and evil force out there who believes in Stew Kasey. Fortunately, for Stew, there is also a force of good looking out for him—his brother. Now, if only Stew knew that he had a brother…
Stew Kasey is a young film critic, content to live an ordinary existence. Sometimes, still, he finds himself searching for deeper meaning in his life. After an attack in an alley puts him in a coma, he discovers just what the word 'ordinary' means and how it no longer has any place in his life. He wakes to a world where everything looks normal on the surface, but there is something else—something hidden beneath the shadows of the mundane. Faeries, leprechauns, gnomes and other magical creatures are not figments of the imagination who roam only in the dreams of children. They’re real. And Stew Kasey is about to find that out.
Genre: Modern Fantasy
I've worked on this as a novel for ten years. For six years before that, it was a screenplay I started while attending college to become a film critic. School didn't work out for me but I get to live vicariously through Stew. I am inspired by all the people that have traveled through my life and chosen to be a part of it. Some of them have shared their musical/cinematic interests which have become mine. Music and movies are a huge influence in my writing. They say, 'Write what you know.' Well, I know pop-culture. I've even created my own soundtrack, consisting mostly of songs I listened to while writing. The idea for the backstory came to me through several Ouija board conversations with an entity who called himself Wiz. I know that begs an explanation but...
Strengths: I pride myself on my dialogue. When I write, the movie plays in my head. I hear my characters talking in my head. If it doesn't sound natural, I change it until it does. I think I've done a pretty good job of taking something familiar and mundane like Charlotte, North Carolina and infusing a bit of magic, in a way, creating my own, secret Charlotte.
Weaknesses: Sometimes I have trouble discerning what I need to expand on and what I need to rein in. I do my best to proofread my own work with a fresh brain so it doesn't fill in blanks where I've left out a detail but sometimes it just doesn't work. Most of my friends and family are too busy to be steady proofreaders. Over-explaining is another weakness. When someone asks about my book, depending on the circumstances, but if time only allows a short explanation, I really have a hard time summarizing quickly.
Here's the link to the book on Inkitt: https://www.inkitt.com/stories/fantasy/78120?preview=true&ref=a_692835b4-73e3-4777-98e1-6f59b710c692&utm_campaign=dark&utm_medium=author&utm_source=dark&utm_term=6aac0625-e73a-42e8-9cab-27557ce7145d
My name is Glesni and I have just submitted my first novel here on inkitt. It is titled "Lazarus: A guardian's Novel" in the fantasy genre. This is my first novel and I would love to hear feedback and constructive criticism.
About my novel: In the past few months, Lily Griffiths has been plagues by nightmares every time she falls asleep. The dream is always the same, witnessing the world end and experiencing her own murder, over and over again. ... See More Elements from her dream soon become reality and she will soon discover that the dreams had been memories, of a life she has forgotten. A life all mankind have forgotten. The world of the past and the world of now threaten to collide as she is hunted by those who wish to use her to destroy mankind. The only ones she can trust are the villains from her dreams. The same man who killed her night after night. Can she truly trust them? Is she on the wrong side of a war she has long forgot? Can she protect the world from the demons who wish to destroy it? Can she protect the world from herself?
About me: I am of welsh heritage and so my novel have many welsh words used to identify those from the other world. I have been writing for years but never finished a novel. Now I have finished and wish to improve my writing abilities.
Strengths: My stories are always my strengths, I am usually good with details as well.
Weakness: My wordings becomes redundant, I find myself forgetting simple terms that could be used instead of one used over and over again. Details can sometimes also be my weakness. Grammar is another major weakness for me.
Please let me know what you think of my novel. I really appreciate you taking the time to read it for me.
Hello! I'm looking for some feed back on my romantic novel called Riah and Leeland.
It's about two kids whose parents actually want them to get together. I feel like the story is strong, but I'm worried that some might find it strange and of course I'd like a second pair of eyes to makes sure I haven't missed anything grammar of semantics wise. .
Thank you in advance for any opinions!
I do invite Beta-readership take a look to Dark Corcel; this horror-thriller work means to get the audience riveted till the last page. Yet, in three months i hadn't get the fiirst review, by the way If dou you find out that i'm bragging; expose my mockingly blurb to the rest of your members. I hang on just need one shot and Dark Corcel will open way through the bookstores.
Regarding your time. thanks.
I'd really like to get a feel for how interesting/engaging my book is and would appreciate some Beta-readership from any interested party!
If you're in the mood for an adventure, sort of sci-fi but also fantasy (it is a fantasy world within a virtual reality video game, so I've struggle with exactly classifying it) then I would love for you to check out an excerpt from my book, Beta 12:
"A virtual world, a civil war, a freckle-faced girl, her boy who ... See More doesn't exist, a lion-master, a vengeful thief, and fancy armor. And of course, no way out."
I'm especially interested in visceral reactions, basically if you like it and why or why not. Of course suggestions and criticism would also be most gratefully received!
As a writer, I enjoy writing fantasy in novel form as well as possibly angsty but hopefully introspective poetry. I'm not sure what my strengths are (gosh that's not encouraging) but as for weaknesses I believe I need to be more concise. Any further information from a reader regarding my style's strengths and weaknesses would be welcome!
In any case, thank you very much!
HellllooooooooBETAReaders!! Hard to write like Winnie The Pooh.... Just dropping in to mention I have three completed manuscripts (Waiting For The Past, The Hollerinth Affair, and Boston Knights) loaded up and one 4/5ths done (Watercolours) also posted to Inkitt. Sci-Fi, Whodunit, and a light romance. The 'almost done' is a bit of a murder mystery/drama. Thank you for your consideration. Hope you enjoy them.
Hello Inkitt Community,
I am looking for some readers for my Novel "The Red Summer"
It is about a young woman who must overcome her self doubt, rise up passed her iniquity, hoping to find faith and courage so she can save her people from those who would like to see them destroyed. Along the way she finds herself, friends she never thought she could have, and slowly begins to unearth the secrets of the Mountain.
If this sounds interesting to you, please check it out in the link ... See More below
"She was surrounded by murderers, liars, kidnappers, and destroyers, bloodthirsty monsters who ruined the balance of the Universe, filthy hypocrites and runted weaklings. She supposed that made her no better--especially with what ran underneath her mortal skin."
Hopefully that sounded interesting, as that's my blurb in the first part of my manuscript Heaven and Hell!
~Yesterday I joined Inkitt and uploaded the first part of my manuscript. It's a sci-fi fantasy with hints of ... See More romance and lots of adventure. Here, in a galaxy where immortals coexist with mortals, seven are chosen to restore balance in an unhinged Universe. Yet it's not that easy when some are already perfectly satisfied with bloody chaos.
This is my first time writing in multiple perspectives with a huge location, the Universe itself and dimensions beyond. I'd also love feedback with world/setting building. In fact, this is the first time my writing will be public. I'm open to all constructive criticism to promote the growth of not just my writing, but my novel as well.
About me, my nickname is Riss and I'm from California. I'm a junior in high school and dream of becoming a published author one day. I'm hoping that Inkitt would be the trunk as I branch out to new styles and writing. Testing the beta-reader waters out here and sending love from CA,
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