I like the story but you need to capitalize the start of your sentence and put punctuation where it is needed, for example in the beginning:
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you wrote, "hello Ms stone" you forgot to capitalize and add punctuation, it should be like this, "Hello, Ms. Stone."
I think you're spacing in between each paragraph should be one smaller, do you know what I mean? Like since you hit enter three to get that,try hitting it only twice instead.
For the finale thing that I find wrong is when you write the person talking then write what they do as they talk separate, for example:
What you wrote:
She shoves him back as she gets off the bed. I stare in absolute shock as she grabs his vase from his tables and smashes it against the floor
What I mean:
"YOU BASTARD!" She said, shoving him back as she gets off the bed.
I stare in absolute shock as she grabs his vase form the table and smashing (or shattering) it against the floor.
I hope I told it right for you to understand what I am saying. By the way, this is just a recommendation you don't have to follow it if you don't want to.
If you need me to try and explain better just ask or check out my stories on how I write.