H_Keiko_K

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I have only read the first five chapters for this review swap and this is what I think.

For the plot I like were things are going and that Toby is changing for the better. 5 stars.

For your writing style I give you 5 stars because I like your style, I could see myself reading your books.

For your technical writing there was one time that I found a mistake, but other then that I found no other mistake.
The mistake was on chapter 5 when Robecca said "You know that I hate you back, I wish that you would have stayed wherever you were taken." The first part of this statement didn't make scene until I read the second part.
What you should have wrought was "You know, I hate that you're back," and the second part you can keep the same. With that being said I give you a 5 as an overall rating for your technical skills.

I gave an overall 5 stars because I think it's a good story, there are some mistakes in grammar but that's is all I found. Though, I wish you gave me the first book and not the second book so I can have a better understanding of the charters and what was going on.

(Sorry, it took me so long to do this review swap, just haven't been feeling the best.)

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I love the way you tell stroies.

Just form the first paragraph, I already know that I'm going to love it. And I did, you did amazing job in getting me into the book. The storys plot, It's different form other apocalypse type stuff I have read, and I like it.
If you ever fully publish this book I would buy it 100%.

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I really like the way the author tells the story and the plot is unique. I would have never thought of writing a story like this.
I really enjoy it.
This gets 5/5 from me.

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I really like the way you told this story just from the first chapter. I can't wait to read the whole story!

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I like the story but you need to capitalize the start of your sentence and put punctuation where it is needed, for example in the beginning:
you wrote, "hello Ms stone" you forgot to capitalize and add punctuation, it should be like this, "Hello, Ms. Stone."
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I think you're spacing in between each paragraph should be one smaller, do you know what I mean? Like since you hit enter three to get that,try hitting it only twice instead.
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For the finale thing that I find wrong is when you write the person talking then write what they do as they talk separate, for example:
What you wrote:

"YOU BASTARD"

She shoves him back as she gets off the bed. I stare in absolute shock as she grabs his vase from his tables and smashes it against the floor

What I mean:

"YOU BASTARD!" She said, shoving him back as she gets off the bed.

I stare in absolute shock as she grabs his vase form the table and smashing (or shattering) it against the floor.
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I hope I told it right for you to understand what I am saying. By the way, this is just a recommendation you don't have to follow it if you don't want to.

If you need me to try and explain better just ask or check out my stories on how I write.
-Thank you.

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