You have a fantastic plot here, good writing style that needs very minor editing but the thing that lets you down is that every chapter reads the same. Sia gets upset with herself or Dominic then he makes it up to her and tells her he loves her because she’s his mate. If you go back to the basics of story writing to develop a plot you need a beginning, a middle and an end. You’ve barley scrapped the beginning. You need to develop a middle, the climax of the story that leaves the reader in suspense, gets there early pumping, get them to want to read and be impacted by your writing because now the only thing making me keep reading is to see them mate and I’m starting to lose interest. They need drama, she needs to be kidnapped or something because after reading 24 chapters of the same thing I’m bored and yelling at me phone.
Read the story now