Great gangster story
I enjoyed reading this story a lot! It’s written in a very pleasant, smooth way, with sentence structures that simply feel very natural. The plot is dramatic, but not overly so. Personally I don’t enjoy so much exaggerated characters or plots, so I took to this story very much. I like it very much that each chapter introduces new characters and environments, this keeps up the suspense. The conversations were also gripping and written in true British gangster (or should I say: serious people?) slang ☺
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One point of criticism I would give is that the references to popular culture are, in my opinion, a bit too much. Michelle Pfeiffer, Elvis, Dire Straits – these all appear in the first two chapters alone. I think this makes the writing a bit more “tacky” than it really has to be.
Another thing that could make the story more colorful is to be more detailed about the surroundings your characters are operating inside. You write (almost?) nothing about how things look, how they smell, how they sound. I think a bit of this would add depth for sure.
In any case, I enjoyed reading this and I hope others do too!