Henry Boyd

Writing for twenty years. Father of two. Coffee drinker.

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Dark Fantasy With Typos

I think what struck me as particularly odd in this story was the flexing genre. It's certainly a Fantasy, but at times it felt like a combination between Horror Fiction and Mystery. I'd classify it as Dark Fantasy, personally. Nonetheless, I found a lot of mistakes whilst reading it, and that hindered the experience for me.

The plot is pretty generic; it actually reminds me a lot of Forbidden Princess, but with an enigmatic tone. The blurb was also quite underwhelming; I would've loved an excerpt, a line, something to tell me about the story instead of vaguely referencing it.

The plot was very, very slow. This is, in my view, caused by the unnecessarily long chapters; they're unmotivating to the eye. The dialogue felt awfully scripted and unrealistic; and I wasn't sure if that was to do with the time period or the plot. I felt it was neither.

There were a lot of typos and weird-sounding sentences; immediately the book starts off with a typo, and if it were a book you'd find in a library, I'd have put it down then. I refrained from pointing them out in the comments section because it would take a long time to actually read the work and analyse it. I wish there was a way to inline sentences. But that's probably the main issue I've encountered; not enough proofreading, or editing. I would highly suggest Grammarly or an experienced editor.

I wish the writer all the best and to reflect on any criticism received, and if some of these issues are resolved, I'd happily alter my ratings.

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Meticulously Crafted!

This is certainly an impactful story! The writing is excellent and well-thought-out.. Definitely something I'd recommend anyone to check out.

My only concerns were the bulky paragraphs that honestly made me want to turn away at points, the author uses actions as dialogue tags, but other than that it's enjoyable so far! Nothing major!

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