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Quite the page turner!

My grandson told me about this story, as it turns out I have a passion for science-fiction and adventure, that's what brings me here.

For me, the plot to this story was very creative, the writer has a rich imagination. His ability to combine fact with fiction, especially within the first chapter was an interesting experience for me. I did not get a chance to review this piece of writing during last month's contest, so I am grateful to have the chance now.

There is such a thing as providing the reader with too much information during the opening chapter, but for me personally, I find there to be just enough information to keep the pages turning, this excerpt being a case in point.

I found the writer's technique of introducing one character at a time to be an effective idea, one can relate better to a character if one has time to fully appreciate them.

I would also like to say that the dialogue within chapters' one and two make for an intriguing read, where they combine love, adventure, humor, general science and future technology, space and time, spaceships, and especially some of that all-out-mystery which writer's love.

I thought that the descriptive detail used to portray the world of 'Julos' in chapter three was a nice touch, I don't know if there is such a thing as being too descriptive, where certain details may be lost on the reader, keep an eye out for this, otherwise, I found that. you could really imagine yourself being there.

Finally, I will conclude my essay of a review. There are some grammatical and punctuational errors throughout the three chapters. As a new writer, I understand that it may be easy to overlook many of these, this is where editors' and proofreaders' come in handy if I am not mistaken. I really enjoyed this work regardless, a sound plot, looking forward to reading the rest of the novel. Keep up the good work!

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Enticing!

I left a somewhat lengthly review on your page for your previous novel excerpt. This one will be shorter I promise.

Firstly, I have noticed an improvement with the author's technical skills (i.e. Punctuation and Grammar). Good job.

The constantly evolving world of Awen makes for an exciting read, and there is never a dull moment throughout the plot. The novel has it all; adventure, love, nature, spaceships' and diverse creatures', it is a journey worth taking.

I have enjoyed getting to know each of the character's intimately, and I must say that the writer's ability to close each chapter on a cliff hanger is an impressive talent.

All that I can say is, keep on working on that grammar and punctuation, and complete this story, please.

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