Nature Calls, Spring Review
I gave this novel an overall 3/5 stars because the highschool setting is relatable, the chapters are rather short and easy to read, most of the characters were given backstory which is AMAZING and there's a decent balance between the magical aspects and the scientific/realistic aspects however there was excessive use of the word gape(d) and gawk which could have been substituted for something different, all these characters are overwhelming especially at the beginning of a story, some of the descriptive imagery is not as clear, some scenes are more dramatic than I think it needed to be (not speaking of the panic attacks by the way), and the subtle inclusion of overused cliches that couldn't have been executed uniquely.
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Suggestions: If you include a character give them some detail because adding caricatures are not exactly ideal and sort of obvious. Add tropes and give them a twist, like make the mean girls nice or make the mean girls related so as the reason they stick together or if they are related give them some background. When introducing a lot of characters give the reader some time to breathe, not sure how you could do this but it would help if your reader is not overwhelmed by the number of characters in the story.
Notes: The poor insulation part of their high school is definitely relatable (C.1).
I show disinterest when one character captivates EVERYONE'S attention like there have to be a few students who don't care (C. 2).
"Was she really a teenager?" Not sure what that implies (C.2).
If I hear gaped ONE MORE TIME. I will punch myself (C.2).
Am I just an overall sad person or do people genuinely squeal? Especially in unison (C.2).
I saw gaped again, due to self-preservation instincts I didn't punch myself as hard as I thought I would.
I DO declare, Jaime is my favorite character and my new girlfriend (C.3).
The visual description of Gust was simple yet I can see exactly how he looks like (C.6). Well, the rest of the characters, I'm not sure.
Honestly overwhelmed (C.6)
I need a character chart for all of these characters (C.7).
Hm, I see Fauna can't forgive humans because of course humans were the cause of suffering no matter what story they're in (C.7).
Anyway, I like Fauna (C.7).
I respect a loving and supportive family (C.7).
Woo, the bullies are here *eye roll* (C.8) Oh and the bully is somewhat related to the football team? Not surprised just disappointed.
Still waiting on the gay (C.8).
Ah yes, the mean girls... Why did I think the trio would be different and actually be kind for a change (C.8)?
I'm assuming Flora is a self-insert just by her paragraph-long response to Jocelyn's insult (C.8).
Flora, for the love of me, please stop making it about you (C.9).
Why is this girl here? What is her purpose in this story (C.10)? Is she just there to help build a connection between Leif and Gust?
Yeah WAY too many characters (C.10)
I think humans were a mistake in the matrix (C.13).
Well, that was dramatic (C.18-19).
Anyway overall, I liked the story despite disliking modern fantasy.