IceCreamCat_

Review

I am coming back to re-do the review when the story is finished because much hasn't happened yet, but it is a good story. So far the plot is heading in a direction, a little fast for my liking but it also feels at the right place. I do not like her father. I am also keeping my eyes on Trent because he has thrown red flags and Trent's father is also on my radar.

Review

At first I was skeptical. I didn't like how fast paced the story moved and wanted more cute parts with them together and them with Will. I could totally enjoy an extra chapter(s) of the future of them being together. It did end too fast, but at the same time at the right point.

It's not a perfect story, slight punctuation and space errors. But overall it was an amazing read. I'm glad it didn't just rely on sex and that an actual relationship was built but that they did find some time to do it.

Review (May contain spoilers)

While this is an amazing story, I felt like it was only about sex between her, Sal, and Logan. Not to mention that she seemed more taken to Sal than Logan. I felt like there should've been more to the relationship than just sex. The plot is good, but I just felt that it was stupid she risked her life when it's not just HER life she had to think about. I thought that was very stupid of her. The change in Riley (I don't think I spelt her name right?) was dramatic, like she was shy and inexperienced and then she just adapted so fast to the life it's like a switch was flipped and she became more confident? We just didn't see a huge amount of character or relationship development. It was a good story over all though.

The punctuation was not there for most of the book and I felt like the author was trying to do first person but went to third person. Their are come spelling mistakes, but the format is all out of wack. What I mean by that is there are line spaces where their shouldn't be and the fancy scene separator. If this story is ever edited I would focus heavily on the format, and punctuation.