Review (May contain spoilers)
While this is an amazing story, I felt like it was only about sex between her, Sal, and Logan. Not to mention that she seemed more taken to Sal than Logan. I felt like there should've been more to the relationship than just sex. The plot is good, but I just felt that it was stupid she risked her life when it's not just HER life she had to think about. I thought that was very stupid of her. The change in Riley (I don't think I spelt her name right?) was dramatic, like she was shy and inexperienced and then she just adapted so fast to the life it's like a switch was flipped and she became more confident? We just didn't see a huge amount of character or relationship development. It was a good story over all though.
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The punctuation was not there for most of the book and I felt like the author was trying to do first person but went to third person. Their are come spelling mistakes, but the format is all out of wack. What I mean by that is there are line spaces where their shouldn't be and the fancy scene separator. If this story is ever edited I would focus heavily on the format, and punctuation.