Interesting. It does need polishing, though.
The story is intriguing. It definitely falls under the sci-fi/fantasy genre with a splash of horror here and there. Even though there is some gore that appears in several parts of the story, it's actually more cute than scary in my opinion. The characters are relatable and likeable. There's also some girl power, which I think is great, and a hint at romance, which I love! I think it is a good idea and creative, but I would like to see it edited and revised in the future. There are so many punctuation errors such as missing periods, comma splices, mislplaced periods, and even missing commas. The story shifts around from present to past tense a lot. In my opinion, there's some unnecessary details that slow down the story. I think I can safely assume that the author is pretty new to writing. The author is strong when it comes to creativity, though, and that's one of the most important things to writing fiction, so I would recommend the author to read books in a similar genre to compare and learn writing style and grammar and punctuation. All these things with practice are an easy fix. I'm looking forward to read what comes next in this story and anything else the author will release. I can certainly count on them for creativity! Good luck writing, and I look forward to see what else happens!
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