Jade

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Not a bad read

It's great for a light read, not so much if you like to really get into the nitty gritty of characters, but if you're just reading to pass the time, this will always be a great choice.

Main character experiences trauma but never really deals with it, which is really my only issue with the story. The actual trauma is so insignificant in the telling of the story that it may as well have not happened, which makes it seem like the trauma is there for shock value (this is not so much bad as it is mildly annoying).

Characters themselves are fairly simple, as is the plot. We don't ever really get into emotions beyond happy, sad, hurt, angry. In all it's a very simple, easy to get into read

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Delicate

If you’re wondering whether you should read this book or not: you should.
If you opened it, saw how many pages there were and thought, “this is gonna drag,”: you’re wrong. It won’t. You should definitely read this book.

When you’re reading this book, because you will read this book if you have half a braincell, listen to the songs as they pop up. On repeat. Until the chapter ends. The author says it’s optional. It’s really not.

There are other books in this series, and another series with the same characters: read those too. Don’t question me, just do it. The first series is a little juvenile compared to this one, but it is still heartwarming, and reading all these books gives you the opportunity to watch the author grow as a writer, and that is almost as satisfying as the books themselves.

There are author’s notes. In the first few books, they’re kind of annoying, but they grow on you. And as they start growing on you, they decrease in frequency. Such is life.

Read the book. Read all this authors books. You won’t regret it (unless you’re reading into the early hours of the morning because you can’t put this shit down).

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Why did you need to make her so... unrealistic in the beginning? What *exactly* is the reason for her just not even talking about the fact that he left her in a dungeon? This isn’t normal. She was literally going through anguish in the dungeon. We hear her talk about the resentment she feels towards Ethan for the entire situation and then he takes her out of the dungeon and she just... doesn’t say anything? Did those feelings just disappear? Being tortured is a trauma, is she just trying to suppress it? Are those feelings repressed? Even if that is the case why is that not shown. Her actions don’t make sense to me and I don’t even have an understanding or a background for why. How am I supposed to keep reading when such a big impactful story arch has just happened and the characters just don’t acknowledge it. Is she just slow? Like I tried to read the next chapter but it’s looking like she has absolutely no intention of even mentally sorting through what she’s been through and I just can’t with that. I just can’t.

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I’m sorry

I got to page 33 and gosh I feel like there could be so much MORE. For example you could have elaborated on Jessara’s training history; why Dillon is how he is; Killian’s story as a whole; the layout of the pack land; the pack dynamic; the alpha’s love for his lost Luna and an underlying sense of grief because of it.

Also the tension between Jessara and Killian could have been drawn out more or even just written more descriptively. Like we find out he was saving himself for his mate... AS they’re mating? That could have been such a good source of hesitance for him., and by extension given his character an extra layer of sentimentality. Like up until this point alone could have been a book on its own, why did you feel the need to cram so much information into one story?

The plot itself would have had me coming back for a sequel, but it feels so clinical and... skeletal? Is that the word? It’s hard for me to muster up much of an emotional connection for the characters and by extension the book because of that. Are you planning on going back and editing more detail and nuance into the book? Because if so, I’d love to read the finished product. But for now, I really can’t finish it. It’s like eating carrot cake, I want to like it but carrots should not be inside a cake. Much love - Jade❤️

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Mixed Up

So far so good

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