Review of The last Moment
Thank you for your intriguing an adaptation of the biblical story. You do need to proof your text more carefully and pay more attention to grammar, syntax and idiom. As for your style, it is a bit muddled. As a reader I do not want to be impressed. I want the story to illuminate. I want to know who the observer is. (I assume it is the divinity but...?) What is the purpose of observing Rita? What is the observer's conclusion? What is the resolution to the question peace vs regret? Is there a lesson to be learned here?
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I think your story would be more impact-full if it were written in first person. This POV would give us insight into Rita's motives, reasoning and rationalizations. If she actually believes she is living a life of no regrets or if she questions her faith in good works? Where did she get the notion n the first place and why does she devote her life to it if she has doubts?
I would be very interested in seeing a rewrite that goes deeper.