A diamond in the rough
When the author is describing scenes, like when the children are playing around the couch, that's when the writing style and story really stand out. The story should probably start with that scene, everything before it doesn't serve much purpose, and could be sprinkled in for the reader in other parts of the story.
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I enjoyed the speed at which things happened, the pacing was really good an we get to the meat of the story very fast. The author has a good style that lends well to this story. It's a little rough at times, but I'd describe it as a diamond in the rough. This reads a bit like a first draft, with some bigger technical problems like changes of tense, but at this stage I would continue with the drafts, finish the story, and then revise.
Revisions can be a lengthy process, but this story would benefit so much from it. Already in this rougher state, the story and characters and setting have a certain life to them, which is a great achievement. With some love and care, the author's style and voice could be really unique, and appeal to a whole new generation of readers.