Jaspira

I write love stories for the hopeless romantic! When I'm not writing I'm reading swoon worthy romance or curled up on my sofa watching Hallmark.

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Great YA Vibe

I know that you said English is not your first language and you have difficulty with grammar, but you did a great job telling the story. I got a really good feeling for who Ellis was and I can see how she and Xander are going to become close. Keep up the good work.

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The story line is good and even though the book is not complete it’s off to a good start. The grammatical errors are not too distracting. I think the pacing needs to be worked on and could improve if the paragraphs were shorter. The story provides good visuals but sometimes too much detail and that effects the pacing. Some of the sentences were run on but that can be addressed in editing. And introducing each character a little slower would be helpful. What I really like is the action. I believe that there is plenty of intrigue and mystery ahead. The characters are primed for drama!

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