-
Writers WriteAuthors can write and upload their manuscripts on Inkit for free and writers retain 100% of their copyrights whilst writing on Inkitt
-
Readers DiscoverReaders can read all books for free, without any ads and give the authors feedback.
-
We PublishBooks that perform well based on their reader engagement are published on our Galatea app.
How It Works
Jazel Morales
Cavite, Philippines
Two things I learned from writing: Read my own work and don't get distracted by social media.
Sensual, sexual, and very detailed..
I would like to commend your execution and delivery. You are one of those authors who can write about your characters innermost desires and expound it. The story was sensual, sexy, provocative and very detailed. One thing though, the location is in Larkspur, North Carolina; you could have add something that makes that place unique or stand out. Like what is NC good at? But that's just me. Prologue felt like they were in Italy that's why I was surprised with NC. Pardon me if I missed anything, I'm still in chapter 6 going chapter 7. Good job! Thank you for your plot.
Read the story nowInteresting plot but...
Interesting plot but there were a lot of things that can be improved. I mentioned them in every chapter; if you could kindly consider them. Grammar lapses, incorrect word usage, and switching of tenses could really disrupt the flow of any story. But it can be corrected by editing and reading your own work. I highly recommend that you try "show don't tell" technique in your story. I could not possibly judge your story based on three chapters, so my review was on the technical aspects. So far it was good. Read, learn and improve. Keep writing!
Read the story now
