Jennie Lyne Hiott

You can close your eyes to the things you do not want to see, but you can not close your heart to the things you do not want to feel. - Johnny Depp

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Great Start!

Reviewing chapter one. I love a bad boy story and this has promise. The first paragraph was hard to read. After that the words naturally flow. Descriptions are a bit vague. Remember to paint the scene with your words. There were a few parts were I would have liked a bit more detail; characters appearance, the Boone boys home, the little brother's appearance - was he sweaty, clammy, pale? Overall, I enjoyed the plot. With a few tweaks, this could be something great. Keep writing! I look forward to the next chapter.

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