Jocelyn

Squeal!

First of all: alsnfbsksoshbanskdidbsbsndlcijsns
Second: I really love those sentences that had the "she was" at the end. It really help make the entire thing surreal and set the mood. I don't know what your plans are for future writing, but if you decided to write more than a one-shot, you could write the one-shot and add various chance meetings. I'd like to see more indirect characterization, but that's a difficult thing to learn (something I've been working on myself). Keep writing! I want your autograph for when you are famous one day!

Fantabulific!

I think this story is so honken bruce! I appreciate all the hilarious points made, like spiders not having feet and all. Love it

*squeals*

This made me happy. Like really happy. I've never seen anyone capture the tranquil feeling so perfectly before!

I'm Impressed

First of all, I've not been allowed to read the series yet and I understood what was happening perfectly. I understand more of how the main characters of the series tend to interact with each other and I was able to spot what you had to change in order to create this plot. But, the change still works well and makes sense! I didn't catch any grammatical errors, either. I really like how it started right off the bat describing how certain events have affected Hermoine and painting her different friendships and worst fears. I'm really impressed by your work!

Squeal

I read the entire thing this afternoon and it was so honken bruce! I like how the story was presented and how the plot unfolded was truly majestic. Thanks for writing this, I loved reading it!

Yaaaaaaaaaaay!!!!

First of all, I really enjoy reading this! As someone who only read the mainstream Percy Jackson series and not the follow-up series, It's very easy to understand and follow. Keep up the outstanding chapters!

Practically Perfect

I absolutely positively love this! The writing style is fantabulous and hilarious. I barely noticed a singpe grammar error, too!

Good Job

I really enjoyed these poems. They are a little darker than I usually read, generally because I am a light-hearted person to most people, but I still connected with them in a way. There were a few grammar errors, but the don't really confuse the flow of the poem. Great job.