Mike Kavanagh

Professional quality

I read the blurb and opener of about 20 other novels on this site before I found this one. I passed the others by because the writing wasn't strong enough to carry the story.

I'm only a few chapters in on this, but the narrative voice here is excellent. Clear, detailed description means we can visualise everything that's happening.

I've not read enough to comment on the plot yet, but the quality of writing is of a professional level. I would not be at all surprised to find this work in a bookshop.

Maybe one day I will :)

Exciting opening chapter!

Hi LoneStorm,

This is great! Wasn't too sure what to expect when I started reading, but you set the scene well, including some beautiful descriptive writing that created a wonderful atmosphere:

"A violin played somewhere far off, accompanied by the gentle lapping along the port docks."

You quickly got into the action, which is really important for hooking your readers, and I felt real panic and concern when Lucy was captured. Then as suddenly as it started, she was rescued by this thrilling stranger... and so the story begins!

Great characterisation of Lucy and Natsu, instant chemistry and mystery... I haven't read the whole novel yet but what I've read so far has captured my attention and I'm very happy to give this a 5-star review.

Best of luck with it!

Mike
Born Of The Flame

Eloquent and moving

Hi Elysian,

Thank you for sharing your story here! It is eloquently written, warm, moving and full of intrigue.

You start with a powerful opening; setting the scene well and then suddenly disrupting the calm with an attack on our main character. The scene where Eralie speaks to her mother for the last time is heart-breaking and you convey the emotion so well that we are drawn into the story.

Your professional writing style means that the reader becomes absorbed in the story - I can easily imagine finding this in a book-shop and hopefully one day it will be. Best of luck with it!

Mike
Born Of The Flame