kim_extrodinar

I'm Kim and I'm from ~Jamaica~ I love reading intriguing stories and I do a little writing myself.... Hope you guys like and enjoy my books!!

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The Six Guardians

This is a promising story with a lot of potential. The summary at the beginning was very interesting, especially the plot entry. I liked the characters, their developments and interactions during the start but I was looking forward to more in your plot.

The plot of your story seems to stay at the same level and dragged out a little. You introduced each Monarch and their different struggles through different chapters, but with such a stunning plot entry, I wanted to be at the edge of my seat for more. It's a good story with an exciting entry, it just wants a little twist in there to make me pop my eyes a little more.

Hope this helped you somewhat. Good job and good luck!

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Simple, but amazing!

When I read the title of this story, it intrigued me and I found it so interesting. At first I was confused about the lead female's predicament, but the more I read the more I was transfixed. This was a refreshing book about a three on one and I loved it.

You made me feel like I was Vanquish, Hunter and Racer's little rabbit. Lol...

Keep up the good work love. Your book is absolutely addictive!

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Bang story!

From the moment I read the storyline and what it was about, I was in love! Keep up the good work!

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Alpha's Boy

Okay, so you said that English is not your fist language and I get that, but your story needs reconstruction. I love the general concept you have for the story, but the plot was kind of all over the place. It wasn't consistent, so I was having trouble keeping up most of the time.

Yes, there are some Grammatical errors in your story, and like all stories, they can be fixed. If you haven't already, you can download the GRAMMARLY app. It's what I use to help me with my writing style and my grammar in my stories and I think it will be a great help to you since English isn't your forte.

Other than those snippets, I think that with more precision and fixing those errors will make this book awesome! Hope this helped you somewhat. Good job and Good luck!

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Shadow shifters

I love every second reading this story. You kept me engrossed and completely locked on this book! I loved the recreation of the toddlers dialogue you had going on. You were spot on recreating that child-like manner so good job!

The only criticism I have really, is that I wanted to see River develop a little more. Her unique powers was a big question mark at the beginning and I was struggling a bit to get the full understanding of it, but other than that, you have a great book here.

Good job!

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Hello...Sir

Okay, so it's pretty obvious that your story needs to be worked on. A lot. I get that it's your first story, but some of the things that went wrong with this story shouldn't have. I could see your idea of what you want shine through, but sadly, it didn't develop into something more. Here's some things you should take into consideration....

Cover - The cover of your story isn't really appealing to the eye. I could barely see the title or your name. I use the Desygner website to create the cover for my books and you can use it too if you want. There's also the infamous Canva app that you can download to make your cover stand out.

Summary - The summary of your story is what pulls a reader in. It intrigues you and makes you want to read your story. Your summary was a bit dull and is in need of reconstruction.

Characters - There was absolutely no character development whatsoever. I liked Rey at the beginning but then I didn't see her personality shine through except for the knowledge that she's a Little. Benji was also on a stand still and how they got together was way too fast. If this was a short story then fine, but you need to reconstruct her life before she meets Benji and when she does meet him, you need to work on their closeness before she ends up living with the man.

Plot - Having a nice plot is crucial to a story. There was no plot here. How Rey got fired from her job, ended up going to the interview for a big company and getting the job the same day, baffled me. It was like the story was at level 1 and jumped to level 10. The story kept falling through and there wasn't any stability there....

Grammar - As you said, there was a lot of grammatical errors in your story. The full stops, commas, and quotation marks were not where they are suppose to be. Even through your dialogue, I saw quotation marks on sentences and thought that someone was speaking when in fact, they weren't. It was very distracting and confused me throughout the story. I recommend downloading the GRAMMARLY app. I use it in my stories to fix the grammatical errors and you can use it too if you want.

I love the concept you have for your story which is the Dom/Little relationship that's going on here. This story just needs to be thought out properly and executed properly. I don't think you thought this story out but working hard on fixing those mistakes will no doubt make it a really good book.

Hope this helped you. Good luck!

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Ray of Sunshine

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I find the whole context of your story adorable. The budding relationship between Dark and Ray is at a good start, I just wish that there was more character development for them. You said that English is not your first language and you did well trying to incorporate it in your work, but there was a lot of grammatical errors, especially throughout some of your dialogue.

The first two chapters were very interesting with the plot, but after that, it didn't develop into something more. I thought that Ray got attached to Dark a little too fast, when she was so obviously scared in the beginning.

It's not a bad story, just needs to be fixed in some areas. Good job and good luck!

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Great new experience!

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I love how different and descriptive your story is. It was a big change on what I usually read but I find myself addicted to Soo-Ahh and Ho-Orabenoi's blooming relationship. I find Jung-In being the humor of the story with him trying to draw Soo-Ahh away from Ho-Orabenoi and it ends up back firing in his face, which, actually brings them closer. I love Soo-Ahh's playful personality and her strong spirit. There was a lot of plot twists throughout the beginning which I loved!

The only criticism I have is that there was quite a lot of grammatical errors, mainly throughout the dialogue between the characters. Other than that, it was a really great story and definitely a new experience.

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Engaging Story!

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You had me hooked on the summary of the story before I even did any real reading. I love how different this story is. The plot, the characters, the imaginative world you've created--it was all so addictive. I love seeing authors stepping away from the cliché storyline on a werewolf book about the mate bond.

Your lead female character is my favorite. I like how unsure she is of herself about her loyalty, whether it is to her family, or her newly discovered mate. I find Erick being a big contradiction which isn't a bad thing. He has a this notion about humans being beneath the werewolf species, yet he has one for a mate, and he seems to be accepting of that which I like. You kept me engaged throughout the story, and it was nice reading Erick's encounter with a mate who was from a species he considered slaves.

Great work, and I'll surely be reading for more!

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Edge of my seat....

This is simply an amazing book! I read all the chapters and found that I was greatly disappointed that there wasn't more. I never would have thought that I would be so captivated by a LGBTQ book, but you have me hooked! I'm in love with Michael's sweet, nurturing character, and I find Dawid funny as hell, knowing that he's attracted to Michael but he has this guard up.

Your writing style has me imagining everything you described in the book, and its refreshing to find an author who just takes you to the places in their book so you can feel like your right there with the character.

Please do update dear, I'm starving for more!

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Good Story?

Hi! I'm new on Inkitt and I would really appreciate the love and support for my new story! Hope you guys love it!

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