Kiwi McLean

A Journey of Fajro

This is a paranormal book dealing with vampires. If you are fond of mystery, this one is for you. The character of the protagonist's father was kept as mysterious. Like why does he spend time with his child? How he dies? All these questions will arouse your level of curiosity to a greater extent. However, I do feel use of punctuations can make the book a great piece. Punctuations is an essential part, and throws an overall impact on the hook like how do you want your readers to read the lines. It helps in providing a better experience. In my opinion, a basic introduction like providing the physical appearance, name, or at least the sex of the protagonist can make the whole thing more interesting (to be honest, I was confused about the gender of the MC). You are doing great, but I think dialogues can be more smooth. You can proofread your work a number of times before publishing to avoid the mistakes. And, you can also check out books from very professional authors to get a better idea (best option). All the best in your journey!

AWW PERFECTION

GUYS DON'T THINK TWICE. Just dive into the book. I bet you are gonna love this. The plot is intriguing and the writing style is smooth. You are going to fall in love with the book. The tiny details of the descriptions is something to appreciate as well. Good job author!

The Exit Plan

I love the flow of the writing and words, accompanied with the amazing characters development.I could feel myself inside the story.The plot is definitely interesting (not mentioning the obvious..lol).
I have not yet completed the whole book but will definitely be doing so in no time.
The book is superb!

Slow burn

Firstly, the small kissing
scene they shared as you have written in the description area really got me bad.I loved it!!!🔥

Secondly, I love the fact you have decided to portray the Muslim culture.

Finally, starting with a wedding scene definitely wants me to dig into the beginning of the whole incident.The prologue was good too.

I am eagerly waiting to read about their married life and how they became a part of this mess.
Waiting for updates Hun😍😍😍

CAPTIVATING!

You have been successful in beautifully and vividly casting your thoughts in the format of a book. CONGRATULATIONS! The chemistry between the characters is undeniable. It was a splendid read! However, I spotted some portions where you might have overlooked the punctuation marks like a period at the end of dialogues (at very few places). It is not an earth-shaking problem:) A quick edit can fix it all, and make the book a masterpiece. Keep up the hardwork sweetheart 🤩

Heart warming story

The topic selected has been put into words beautifully. I was so thrilled to read how the tiny creature changed the lives of Anna and Sean. It made me wanna have a baby of my own😅
Even after being expressed in one chapter, it succeeded in covering so many emotions.
Well done sis!

Zac And Emma

Read a first few chapters and I am already addicted to this book. The cover is amazing. Good effort!! Zac and Emma are super cute together. Looking forward to read more:)

Sensing Hot Romance!

Aw I love highschool romance books. It is obvious I am gonna love this book, haha.We have a real hooker here🔥But on a different note, I would suggest you to end the sentences with a single dot rather than using three or more ans use capitalisation, and gaps in between punctuations and words. We usually use more than one dot or a dash to show interrupted sentences. Gray, the name is really cool and everytime I hear Grey, it remindse of Christian Grey From Fifty Shades.I can't wait to read more.Good luck!!

Recommended

Man, this is an awesome story!!! I am just rendered speechless by the beauty of the writing.Totally recommend 😊