This story has really great bones; the plot, the original lyrics and the characters are all wonderful. I just wish we got a little slower of a pace for some scenes. Overall, though, I'm really excited to see where you take this story. Obviously it's not perfect but no story is but I think you're headed in a prosperous direction and with a bit more practice you could be a best seller one day if that's your dream. I would love it if you linked an audio recording of the original songs in your story I think it would give it a lot more depth and would make reading it enjoyable and more fun. I really like Lila's characterization, when we first hear about her she's a "man-stealer" and we're meant to dislike her, but when we're introduced to her we can pick out likable qualities in her character whether they're real or not. I think that makes for an excellent story when you're able to like the supposed villain. Anyways, again I'm really excited to read more of this and see what happens between Chloe, Lila and Carter. Keep up the great work!
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