Great concept, could use more description
I really like the concept of this story and the characters that were created for it. The two things that I wish it did a little bit more are more description and more dialogue tags. Because Myra has so many voices in her head, and those voices are supposed to be entire people that she is imagining, I feel like they should have dialogue tags, clear names and delineations, and clear personalities.
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Overall, the story is very creative and I like the idea of Jonah and Myra having to work through their issues. I think that it will be interesting to see if Jonah is actually able to redeem himself in a way that the readers would accept, as redemption arcs can be very difficult to pull off. All in all, a great read!