Kvarch

First two chapters

Great stuff so far! I like the idea of letters, and the narrator is fun to have as the main POV. I like the descriptions used and the narration is on point. I like the turning point with the two characters, too, especially since the end of the first chapter ended so harshly.

I think the only area of critique I can think of is to read over and check for grammar mistakes (I did notice a few) but they aren't super distracting.

Overall, this is really well done and I will keep reading!

Good job so far!

Overall, this is a solid start. I do like Katrina, and I like how the first official chapter (after the prologue) was introduced like a hunt but it turned into a game of capture the flag. It kept me interested and wanting to find out what happens.

I do think running this through a grammar check (Grammarly is great!) would help the overall grammar, punctuation, and other mechanical issues. There are some run on sentences, and some details that could be tightened up. For instance, instead of repeating the snow was fluffy, you could compare it to something, or use other adjectives to describe it. Let your readers know how Katrina feels and what's going on in her mind using internal dialogue- don't simply tell us.

Good start though! I'd be interested in reading more.