K. Zoy L.

Paris

Born in Switzerland, currently in Paris. I lived most of the time in Europe.

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Entertaining

Some grammar mistakes. The story is created on unspoken facts … the characters are strong and well described.

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As a movie

Story so far well written. The surroundings are very well described as the characters too. What I like the most is the descriptions done by the protagonist. You can see what is before her. It is like a movie, so vivid and bright.

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Love it

I rally liked. Well written. I wonder what is the next part of the story

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I like

I liked the story. It seems to be something new and fresh. It is very well described. I found out some sentences of the narrator disruptive, in the firsts two chapters.

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Intriguing

I think the story is very well written and also something new and fresh.
What doesn’t fit to me is the Japanese culture description.
1) the story is located in Japan. I think the Chang family name is more Chinese so it doesn’t fit to much with the role.
2) traditionally the bath in Japan is taken once you have cleaned your body
3) I like the story but Kita’s behaviour doesn’t look to me as bad as I would expect as a Yakuza member.
I hope it helped.

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