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Love It!

I like the characters especially with Luke, Brian and Evelyn. The plot is pretty good and keeps you curious for the next event to come. I would definitely continue to read.

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Good Story

At first, it was a story of humans vs werewolves and then it was uniting the both races. It had good prose, easy to follow along, punctation & grammar is good with the exception of not having a seperate POV at times but other than that. It is a good story.

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Good story, needs more refinement

The story is good and it does have promise. I notice the paragraphs are squished together, some parts of the story felt rushed instead flowing freely. The dialogue can be confusing on who is speaking. Clean on the punctuation, grammar and the flow of the story.

Until then, I'll think it would need some more work.

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The story is interesting

The puncuation and the prose of the author is pretty good as well the way of getting you invested in the story for the beginning.

Fix up the paragraphs down to 2-3 and add more chapters. You have a good story on your hands. Nice work!

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Good story, just need more chapters

Aside from space out some of the paragraph and adding more chapters into the novel. This definitely will keep me interested in the story.

Good Job! πŸ˜€πŸ˜Ž

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Can make you feel

I love the story especially when the author coneys the feeling in each chapter. I'll keep reading it until the end!πŸ˜€πŸ˜‚

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I love the story, Need more chapters

The author's prose as well the pace of the story is very good, I am eager to read more the chapters from the book. But the best part, I love the main character being able to sneak out and learn more about the world around her and learning about how her family keeps her in the dark.

I would definitely continue to read this.

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Please add more into the story

It may be short on chapters for right now, It does have potential and the grammar and Punctuation is good as well the story's prose.

I would like to continue reading the story, just add more chapters. Don't forget to remove the whitespace.

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Love the story, please finish

Aside from grammar errors, I have enjoyed the story especially with the two unlikely pair falling in love. It also shows not all of the rogues are that bad, just gotta take the time to know them.

Please finished the story, It is good so far.

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The story was good

The story was intense, exciting, unexpected, but it was enjoyable to read from.

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Love It

I've enjoyed the story and It was very good and interesting. I want to be able to read it's sequel when it comes out.

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Worth Reading

The author has put together a good story and made characters really great to get behind. Especially the main protagnist, not making it easy for the king to claim his queen. Grammar and Prose is good, I will read further.😁

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Good Story

I love the story from beginning to end. The part nearly scared me when the protagonist was nearly eaten alive by zombies. Other than, I would recommend this story and read be able to read it again.

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Good Story!

I loved the story due to the rich interactions of the characters especially with Aylin and Ezekiel, it also had a lot of twist and turns. I would read it again, too.

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Good, Can use some work

I read the novel, I enjoyed the part of the plot where they kidnap a princess from a foreign country only to learn she is a prisoner of her home and the alpha grown detached to her.

However, I noticed a wall of paragraphs throughout the chapters. You should reduce it to 2-3 sentences, reader can follow on it better than a 5-sentences paragraph believe me, I know. I had that experience once, they can feel it is a essay, not a story.

While I am attrached to the characters in the story especially with Cora and Steven's pack. While I am okay with the occassional OOC moments. You will need to describe the characters, the actions and if not the plot and if not make the character development not too quick but not make it slow. It can get take them out of the story and make them feel discombobulated.

Other than that, I would continue to read the story.

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Enjoy the Book

I love the book with all of its twist and turns and not to mention seeing a preview of the next book. Nice job!

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Intense! Good Story

What I loved about the story is its rich characters as well them having to face the realities of the zombie Apocalypse as well learning the dangers of it. I would continue to read this and recommended it.

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Enjoyed It

The story has the grammar and prose down as the characters coming to life and excitement personalities. I would definitely read it again..

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Love It!

I would definitely recommend this book and the prose is spot on. I love the characters, too, and it flows on its natural pace.

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Good Story

Good job, the story is relatable and heartwrenching and the Grammar & Prose makes it easier to follow except for the unused white spaces within the chapters. Other than that, I did Enjoy the story.πŸ˜πŸ˜€πŸ˜€

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Worth Reading

I definitely love the plot where Jessica joins a gym and meets with her soulmate and the grammar is good where you can follow along with the story. Especially with the two of them, making love with each other. Good Job!

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Good story would continue to read

This is a good story where the wife gets a chance to do things on her own and met a man by circusmtances to give her independence. Good Grammer although the story went bit fast for my liking and the prose is good to follow. Nice Job!

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Good Start

Hello,

I would to say that I enjoyed the story after reading 4 chapters for so far. The grammar and the prose is good whereas the reader can follow along with the story. I have enjoyed the part where Max and Sarah experienced new things in a new environment, especially where the Doctor shows to be understanding and isn't quick to judge for being Jewish.

There is more to read about the story, so I will continue to read it. It is a good story to read.

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Confusing, need more clarity.

The story can be confusing as I cannot get a understanding of the plot or feel it's flow. They are grammar errors that need to be fixed- Break the paragraph into 2-3 sentences, the comments should be ex. "John" not John"" and when the characters talk make sure to seperate from them like:

"Hello Riley!" I waved to meet with her.

"Oh, Hello Angela!" She smiled and greeted me with a hug.

Also, Punctation is recommended. To simply put it, the plot should not be rushed or confusing, but otherwise it does have potential to be good.

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