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𝕙𝕖𝕝𝕝𝕠 <πŸ› π•Žπ•–π•€π•₯π•π•’π•Ÿπ•• π•šπ•€ π•£π•–π•€π•¦π•žπ•–π••! π•Šπ•™π•–/ℍ𝕖𝕣 𝔽𝕖𝕖𝕝 𝕗𝕣𝕖𝕖 π•₯𝕠 𝕑𝕠𝕀π•₯ π• π•Ÿ π•žπ•ͺ 𝕨𝕒𝕝𝕝 𝕠𝕣 𝕝𝕖𝕒𝕧𝕖 π•£π•–π•§π•šπ•–π•¨π•€ :) 𝕄π•ͺ π•“π• π• π•œπ•€ 𝕒𝕣𝕖 𝕗𝕠𝕣 𝕄𝔸!!! / "β‚›β‚˜β‚β‚—β‚— β‚›β‚œβ‚‘β‚šβ‚› α΅’β‚™ β‚œβ‚•β‚‘ α΅£α΅’gβ‚•β‚œ dα΅’α΅£β‚‘cβ‚œα΅’β‚’β‚™ cₐₙ β‚œα΅€α΅£β‚™ β‚’α΅€β‚œ β‚œβ‚’ bβ‚‘ β‚œβ‚•β‚‘ bα΅’ggβ‚‘β‚›β‚œ β‚›β‚œβ‚‘β‚š β‚’f yβ‚’α΅€α΅£ β‚—α΅’fβ‚‘"

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Okay!

The story was deep and I can infer based on the clues, which is great! I just feel like things are happening a little to quickly, but it's only the first chapter. I would recommend giving flashbacks or more of a backstory, but you may have already thought of that. Very good work!

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Interesting Plot!

Very interesting plot, It will keep someone hooked very easy. I think there are some grammatical issues, but you can fix those if you would like. I see lot's of potential in this story, and I will continue reading. Overall this is a pretty good book :)

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Good!

I think this has a very good plot, very interesting in that area.. It just has some grammatical issues. I feel like it is hard to follow up on as well. When they were going to school, I felt as if you should have put more detail, and more of a detailed transition. Or you could have said in a new paragraph, that the characters have reached school, while in the other one you explain you transition more. Also you need longer paragraphs, your missing some full paragraphs, that's a reason it was hard to follow up on. But overall the story plot is great! and the book is nice! I will read further on.

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The plot is amazing!

I love the plot of the story overall. I read the first chapter and I can tell that I'm gonna be hooked!

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