Lucinda_Amare

Vosselaar

I am a 32-year-old mother of two. Besides writing, I also love art, drawing, music, and belly dancing. Everyone coming across my page is free to follow me. I hope you enjoy my stories :)

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My kind of story

This is definitely my kind of story. Egypt, pharaohs...
I love the writing style, it's clear and has a nice flow to it. Also, I love the dialogues and the way you make them speak. Polite, respectful, ancient.
Interesting characters also, I especially love the way you portray Ramses. Respectful and loving to 'all' his women.
Very nice! I read two chapters now, I will read more when I have the time. Good job!

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Good theme

I like the witchy theme that's going on here and it has nice poems as well.
The only thing that 'annoyed' me a little was that the writer uses the character's names maybe a bit too much which kinda ruins the 'flow' of the text...

'Grams says...grams does... grams takes... grams yells..."
"Blair took...Blair looked...Blair thought...."
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If it wasn't for that it would've been nicer and easier to read :)

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