An enjoyable story, but admittedly leaves some to be desired.
The actual structure of the writing was really good; near perfect grammar and punctuation and I didn't notice any spelling mistakes, which is nice to see.
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The story itself is actually fascinating. The idea of vampires having beloved's, and the interesting dynamic of a vampire's control being broken, for lack of a better term. It added some uniqueness to the story that I much enjoyed.
However, despite this being a romance, I don't think the actual romance was carried out that well. I didn't feel much for either character, as there was little to no development, and there was no excitement or a feeling that I should ship it, partly because of how they met and the fact that they just kind of jumped at each other lustfully instead of any kind of steady escalation and getting to know each other.
The hunter x vampire trope is actually quite fun, and I like that Romeo and Juliet style difficulty they have to overcome. I just wish it were more momentous. In the end, it didn't feel like a problem at all. I feel like there should have been more scenes relating to Kendra hunting, and like she should have had more of a reaction to Tobias admitting his accidental murder of a girl.
Kendra and Kimberly's mother was a very lacking antagonist. I don't mean to be harsh, but I felt like she had a lot of promise but her writing let it down. She came across more like a kid's cartoon villain, there was no sense of her actually being a danger... And the whole thing with Jude made no sense. (Also, as someone with sisters, I feel like "moron" is hardly the worst nickname two close sisters would have come up with). Even with their mother being a crazy lady, no mother would have no reaction to a guy sneaking into her daughter's bed, naked! I mean that's sexual harassment, trespassing and breaking and entering... So many kinda of messed up.
Their mother would have been a better antagonist had she had legitimate reason in her mind to push them together. Like "Jude is a hunter too, and he comes from a good family... He would keep you safe, and the marriage would raise our status in the hunter community" or something like that. And maybe her intense hate for vampires could come from something like "Kendra, listen to me! My sister was a vampire's beloved, and guess what happened!? It killed her!". She can be a villain, but give her legitimate reasons to be a villain. A good way to think about this is that villains are always heroes in their own story, and are always scarier when they have a genuine reason to believe what they are doing is right.
All in all, I did enjoy this, I mean I read to the end and I don't tend to finish books I really dislike. More so I think this story has a lot of potential and with some editing and subplots that would pull everything together, it would be a great story. Also, maybe mix in some bonding scenes between Tobias and Kendra as well as all the sex scenes. Just so we have a reason to care about them, yknow? Otherwise it ends up reading more like porn without plot, which is a shame considering I think the plot is the best part of this that shows the most potential. You really have done a good job, I just think this would benefit from a redraft :)