A great imagination
First I LOVED THE STORY!
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You made me care about your characters in the opening chapters and this made me carry on reading to see how things panned out for them.
Your descriptive text early on helped me visualise your characters clearly.
You were careful not to upset anyone and chose your subject matter wisely.
I saw your writing grow as I read along and you got to know your characters; and I loved your prose.
Only downside for me is that sometimes I wasn't 'with' the characters I was a third party reading about them (and this might just be me) but terms such as 'had been' and 'have been' somehow detached me from them but apart from that I'm looking forward to reading more of your work.
Thank you for such a lovely story and for sharing it with us.