A little different
The story started off absolutely fantastic, The 'what happens next' hook pulled me in.
I like the way the author defined the personalities.
The love story was cute, the characters likeable and believable.
By the time I got to chapter 19, the story repeated itself, it lost its realist edge.
At the beginning of the story, the author proved that she has a good grasp of the American/English language, and my only advise at that point would be to check the dialogue tags and punctuation surrounding them. The further the story went on, the punctuation, spelling and grammar were hurried and got sloppy which is a real shame because it let the author down., she's better than this.
Overall the author has a great imagination and makes the reader fall in love with her characters. I'm looking forward to reading great things from her in the future.
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