M Cobbett

Love the story love the characters

Love the story love the characters. The author could do with paying attention to the spelling and grammar. The further along it gets it reads like it's rushed.

A little different

The story started off absolutely fantastic, The 'what happens next' hook pulled me in.
I like the way the author defined the personalities.
The love story was cute, the characters likeable and believable.
By the time I got to chapter 19, the story repeated itself, it lost its realist edge.
At the beginning of the story, the author proved that she has a good grasp of the American/English language, and my only advise at that point would be to check the dialogue tags and punctuation surrounding them. The further the story went on, the punctuation, spelling and grammar were hurried and got sloppy which is a real shame because it let the author down., she's better than this.
Overall the author has a great imagination and makes the reader fall in love with her characters. I'm looking forward to reading great things from her in the future.

Great imagination

Although I found it an emotionally difficult read and I wanted to see the twins dead and buried at the end of it, I was hooked best part of the way through.
The dialogue tags and punctuation could do with some work and as the story went on it had a hurried feel to the writing and obvious spelling mistakes went uncorrected.
The author has the imagination to take the writing further but rape stories don't sell well. People ostensibly require the HEA.
I wondered more than once if the author was speaking from personal experience and it unnerved me.
If anyone is/has suffered from this kind of abuse I suggest counselling and reporting the culprit of abuse to the police in all instances. Even years after! If a sexual predator isn't reported to the police they will continue to commit the acts.
I'd like to see some happier stories from this author, as I said she has a fantastic imagination and her prose is good.

Gangbang

This has the potential to have a good strong storyline but it reads like it's sex for sex's sake.
I was left thinking that Derek didn't get the revenge he deserved and Tommie was as bad as Harley.
I did appreciate the author's use of adjectives.

A great imagination

First I LOVED THE STORY!
You made me care about your characters in the opening chapters and this made me carry on reading to see how things panned out for them.
Your descriptive text early on helped me visualise your characters clearly.
You were careful not to upset anyone and chose your subject matter wisely.
I saw your writing grow as I read along and you got to know your characters; and I loved your prose.
Only downside for me is that sometimes I wasn't 'with' the characters I was a third party reading about them (and this might just be me) but terms such as 'had been' and 'have been' somehow detached me from them but apart from that I'm looking forward to reading more of your work.
Thank you for such a lovely story and for sharing it with us.

My Stepfather's Son

It's a kinky premise, one of the explosive erotica sub-plots, a forbidden fruit.
The storyline is good, and the author made the character's likeable even the bullying Lucas.