Maeve Lindley

An Unequal Share

Great story. It flows nicely and gives the reader a great understanding of Vero. I love the plot and the fantasy aspect. Highly recommend!
Only a couple of small grammar mistakes noted but reads soooo goood!

Confused...

I could not tell you what the aim of this story is other than an author documenting their life experiences or.... writing little snippets of stories.
The language and writing is hard to read and follow.
I am unsure if it is just me as I am dyslexic and may have confused myself!
I would consider using a text to speech program to hear what you have written or free spelling grammar and punctuation checkers like grammarly. This may help with your writing.

Sorry if my words and review is harsh...

Good start

This is a good start. There is only 1 chapter and reads more poetically than most.
I would recommend reviewing your paragraph structure, the large block of text/paragraphs makes it harder/less engaging to read.
You should also consider punctuation and grammar too, I found myself re-reading passages to understand what it is you are trying to explain/portray.
Keep on improving.

Excellent plot

I have found myself thourally enjoying this plot and the descriptions of the performances.
The dynamic between the pair and how it grows is great.
I like the little details around juli s past and how that is still affecting her today.
I will be keeping this on my reading list
I highly recommend it to anyone wanting a change from the typical romance/drama book it's a great breath of fresh air and it's well written... bonus!!

Uncle's obsession (Review Swap)

The chapters are very short and i would suggest reviewing the technical writing, the block of text can be overwhelming.
I am intrigued by the blurb. Keep going and review your writing.

My Daddy Dominant (Review Swap)

While I am not a huge fan of smut and erotic novels (especially after the hype of 50 shades...) I appreciate the writing style and the plot. I did find myself pulled in at chapter 2. I might even read more!
Keep up the work I think this WILL be popular :D

Fated

This is a great start - I would suggest relooking at your first few chapters. I can see you writting has improved in later chapters, you just need to review and update the first couple - there were a lot of large paragraphs!
Overall keep going!, if you are first reading this, the writing does get better! give it a chance :)

Born to be his wife (review swap)

While the plot seems interesting I think the author needs to rethink the delivery and writing style of this story. it seems very bland, not much substance or description. Also, sometimes I cannot tell who has said what.
This does have great potential but I think you may need to refine your writing a little more - take a look on YouTube and other blogs on how to improve your writing.

Behind the mask (Review Swap)

Great compelling plot with mystery. I like the dialogue and how current/up-to-date the story is. I cannot wait to read more.

Dance of the Damned

A great hidden story here. I really love the plot, the detailed horror (btw good call on the warnings!)
I like the little bits of hot romance too!
What I would suggest is perhaps taking a second glace over your chapters... a lot of the paragraphs are really long! and with speech you want new dialogue to be on a new line.
But great stuff i will be looking out for/reading the next installments!

Catchy plot

This is great I have enjoyed reading the first couple of chapters. The first chapter ankes you empathise with the FC but it would be nice to describe her anger a bit more... show don't tell if that makes sense..? But great second chapter. 👌
I will be reading more

Good start

This is a good start to what could be a great story.
I would recommend you review your chapters and check spelling, punctuation and grammar. Ellipses are only meant to be three dots ... for example.
You should also capitalise 'I' and review your speech marks; if there is a new person talking it should be on a new line. You could also consider grouping your chapters together as they are relatively short - unless you want to upload many chapters at once of course!

Very compelling!

wow wow wow... Great plot and writing... I will be reading more!

Love a good agent book

The first chapter brings you mid-action, I cannot help but want to read more. Your writing and description are terrific. I will be reading more!

From the very first chapter

From the first few chapters the sexual interest in from the start. Walker is a typical one track mind but the banter is fun.
I would say to reconsider the longer paragraphs try to break them down into two or three seperate ones it will help with reading... I am currently on a mobile, so that first paragraph filled my whole screen! 😅

Thrilling! :O

The first chapter really puts you on the edge of your seat. I may have to read this with the lights on... maybe even sleep with a night light!

Great fantasy plot!

Only on chapter 2 but I will be reading more.
I love the drama/mystery of the first chapter it really pulls you into wanting to know what happens next.

Keep it up!

For the Sci Fi Lovers

This is the first time I have read a sci fi novel on inkitt and I am not disappointed! A great first chapter to pull in the reader, it makes me want to know more, why they are there, where are they. I like the suspense and mystery in the first chapter. Keep up the good work

Relatable

Great story, nice long chapters. keep up the great work!

Different plot

This is not like the other werewolf stories, it takes on a different plot which is a nice change.
It is not for myself personally. but your writing and ability to write is excellent - I appreciate a great talent.
Keep it up!

Climate change is important

Okay, I get the plot, and it is a short story. I would be questioning why a doctor would be telling me this and not a researcher? or even news coverage - you could have changed it into the mother doing her own research etc. A doctor will only diagnose, test and cure then a researcher finds the cause. but I get why you have written the plot in this way. This is just the scientist in me being a little picky!
Great writing, it will really pick up mothers hearts and pull the readers in.

Great character

Great plot, great character, not my style of writing or theme but great - I will take the warnings - don't read in public! :O
keep up the great work.

The work of a Poet

Loved this, I took time to read it through entirely and the conflict at the beginning. The do I or don't I and the ending. Woah! - I don't want to spoil it for anyone!
Great poetry!

Teen romance

Great plot. you have great writing a couple of improvements here and there, but I love a good high school story. I am a sucker for them! :D
Keep it up :)

Okay... I think I'm going to binge this one!

I love a good supernatural book first two chapters really bring it in. cant wait for more!

Great plot just not my cup of tea!

It is clear from the slang in the beginning this is a 'hood' book. I would not be afraid to write out the swear words like Fuck, shit, hoes etc. If this is a diary of an adult! personal preference!
chapter 3 does read more like a screen play - i would look more into your structure when reading on computer/web based as the sentences start a new line half way through. You could always make clear paragraphs between each person speaking.
The main character is confident and I putting myself in her shoes, I can see she thinks on her feet and street smart.

Keep up the good work, continue to improve for the readers!

Period Drama - LOVE!

I am a massive fan of the period you have set! I decided to read a while chapter before reviewing, you leave the suspense! I want more! The writing and plot is very compelling. I think is need to binge this... I need to know what happens next!

First chapter reeled me in.

The PoV switches are on point. The first chapter reeled me in, love a good smut ;) cannot wait to see the direction this story takes!